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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I love rainy days, watching the drops gather slowly into a flood, Like my tears when we're apart. Droplets of love that spill from my lips to your ears, Like the blood drips from my broken heart. As each droplet of blood adds to my veins, as each Raindrop adds to the storm, I only dream my words will fill you with Love And cause my cold heart to warm. Droplets of love and droplets of Time, mark each breath, second, And hour until you are mine. Unlike many, I would not presume to own you Nor pressure you to accept or decline. But like droplets of perfume Sweetening the air, Your presence in my heart, Lessens despair I love rainy days, For they make me Think of you. Droplets of wine, like bloody splatters proving like this life of mine that nothing else matters. Unanswered love fills me with regret for all that might have been My wounded heart bleeds and yet for her I will try again. (This is ongoing and will remain unfinished, I will add a verse from time to time) ------------------ Patience is a virtue, but virtue has never been one of my redeeming qualities. [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 06-27-99).] [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 06-29-99).] |
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sheba57 Member
since 1999-06-27
Posts 64vincennes, in usa |
very nice piece - i really like your visualization! i can understand the pain of losing someone but also not wanting to own or pressure someone to stay. as i said - very nice job! ~ celtic rose ~ |
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Moonlight Member
since 1999-06-25
Posts 105Auburn, Alabama USA |
I like it as it is - but I'll be interested to see how it changes. Right now I like the way it seems to start off a little slow and builds up then taper off again. When you read it aloud you can see that effect more, maybe, I think. Kind of like a rainstorm... I always enjoy your work.... ~m o o n l i g h t~ ------------------ www.auburn.edu/~fergum1 ~*Only when it is dark enough can you see the stars*~ |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Thank you ~celtic rose~, praise is always a two-edged sword, balancing it is tough. Moonlight, you know this was written for you. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Just bringing new verses to light. |
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elvira Senior Member
since 1999-07-06
Posts 936California |
i do so enjoy your "lighter" side, but also love to be enveloped in your darkness  ------------------ Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I thought this one had disappeared from the stacks altogether. Thank you, Elvira. |
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Dragon Member
since 1999-07-14
Posts 138Highmount,NY ,USA |
You know I want the rest! Beautiful as always! |
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Gentle Soul Member
since 1999-07-12
Posts 273Vinton,Ohio USA |
hehe nice.. and I apologize for hehe'ing so much.. but I cant stop!! AH ------------------ Gënt£ë¤§°û£ |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Absolutely and stunningly beautiful! ------------------ ~one voice~ *You are you, and I am I, and if by chance we find each other, it's beautiful.* |
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azblond Senior Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 637The Steamy Desert |
I do so love the rain......especially the cleansing feeling after it has ended. Maybe that's the direction this one will go...but as I'm sure you're thinking Dream...who knows? ------------------ For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting... |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Who indeed? Not me, one voice |
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