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Open Poetry #1

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sheba57
Member

since 1999-06-27

Posts 64
vincennes, in usa

0 posted 1999-06-27 01:58 AM

i love you
i want to hold you and be held by you
i want to feel your mouth on my breast
i want to feel your hands on my back pulling me into you
i want to feel your skin against mine
i want to feel your passion
i want to take you within me
i want to keep you here in this place we have made
i want you to love me.

~ celtic rose ~

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~ celtic rose ~

angelfire'99
New Member

since 1999-06-27

Posts 2
oceanside, ca, usa

1 posted 1999-06-27 02:50 AM

I like your style, I can feel the words as if they are real. Awesome.

Wolfgang
Member

since 1999-05-24

Posts 124
Hamilton, Ont. Canada

2 posted 1999-06-27 12:08 PM

Hi sheba57.
I think you will get a lot more responses if you title your poems. For this one, why not "I want to...". There are many (including me) who often skip untitled works and go on to the next one.
Just an idea.

sheba57
Member

since 1999-06-27

Posts 64
vincennes, in usa

3 posted 1999-06-27 08:48 PM

thanks for the tip, wolfgang. i usually do title my pieces - just couldn't come up with something that i liked for this one. thanks again.

celtic rose

Christina Myers
Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 159

4 posted 1999-06-27 10:10 PM

I love your stuff, celtic rose... it has a longing in it that I can readily identify with..

sad to say sometimes! lol

-C

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