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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-06-26 10:41 PM


Dear honey...well, it's been a while
Since I took pen in hand.
I've meant to write you sooner -
Sometimes things don't go as planned.

There always seems so much to do
With work and school and such.
Please know that I am missing you
And love you very much.

The job? Oh, it's about the same.
Not too much I can say.
Each day is like the one before
Without a raise in pay.

The flowers that we planted, uh,
Last spring, if I recall
Have blossomed out quite beautifully
Against the garden wall.

The neighbors ask if you're ok.
Sometimes they turn away
When I say that you're fine and you'll
Be home soon any day.

The boys have been a real help.
They pitch in with the chores
Though Jimmy's only nine years old
And Mikey just turned four.

But Mikey takes the garbage out
While Jimmy cuts the lawn
And, late at night, when tucked in bed
They ask me where you've gone.

I tell them that you're searching for
That thing you have to find
To give your life importance and
Relieve your troubled mind.

Then, once you find it, you'll return
And, once again, we'll be
What we had been before you left..
A real family.

Well, look at me, I'm rambling on
And here it's almost two.
Just want to tell you we are fine
And really missing you.

I don't know where to send this 'cause
I'm not sure where you are
But that's ok. You love us and
You can't be very far.

I'll put it with the others
Piled high on the kitchen shelf.
When you come back you'll have the time
To read them for yourself.

Well, honey, not much more to say.
Be nice to feel your touch.
The boys and I are waiting here.
We love you very much.


© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15
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Oklahoma City, OK, USA
1 posted 1999-06-26 10:51 PM


Dang Balladeer, thanks for the pick me up... now I'm depressed. The loneliness and heartache really comes through. Great work as usual!
chzbrgrNparadise
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2 posted 1999-06-26 11:51 PM


this is truly amazing. (formally known as joyfulltune)
Nan
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3 posted 1999-06-27 12:06 PM


So, you know what's good about this - other than your typically perfect rhyme, meter, and message?????
This is an asexual piece of work... Anyone can relate...

Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
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Ohio
4 posted 1999-06-27 01:08 AM


......Opens a new bottle of Merlot.....pours a glass..... ~sigh~ .....Join me? Perhaps you are in need of a glass? I happen to have an extra, right here.
.....raises the glass....


[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 06-27-99).]

Balladeer
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5 posted 1999-06-27 02:05 AM


Thank you all.

Sea.........cheer up!

Sally, I'll be right over. What was that address again?

Lost Dreamer
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
6 posted 1999-08-20 11:51 AM


Sir Balladeer, To say you can't write a poem to express your deep feelings, who are you kinding? Maybe only yourself.
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7 posted 1999-08-20 12:23 PM


How poignant.... wonderful poem, 'Deer!
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
8 posted 1999-08-20 12:39 PM


I read this some time ago...I guess it hit home too hard and I didn't say, "Well Done, Sir!"

I think He broke the mold when God made You!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



elvira
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since 1999-07-06
Posts 936
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9 posted 1999-08-20 06:20 PM


words fail me, Balladeer, as they did the first time i read this...then again, i always say, a clever reply is not necessary, so i'll just say, as i have many times before, bravo !
hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
10 posted 1999-08-20 07:41 PM


Very nicely done Balladeer
Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
11 posted 1999-08-20 09:12 PM


This is a very noble poem. Hoping against the odds ... it is impossible not to sympathize with the speaker. Well written.

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(When I hear the bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")


pusskatt
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since 1999-07-22
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Austrralia
12 posted 1999-08-20 09:22 PM


All I can say, with tears flowing is, beautiful.
Klassy Lassy
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Oregon
13 posted 2006-02-15 01:35 AM


Ballad of a broken heart--and breaking mine! The illusion of looking out for happiness, when looking in reveals unlimited possibilities... what a crushing blow to those who love us anyway.  

If you had any more insight, it would probably be called second sight... and I am not sure that is not already true!

~ Karen ~

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