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Alysia
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since 1999-06-26
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american falls, idaho usa

0 posted 1999-06-26 07:34 PM


* Realism speaks in a subtle tone.
Mine ears are harkened to its call.

   "Anon fair child!  Wilst thou go with me?"

Mild wind fancies reconciliation and plays with locks of my hair.
Trees stand erect above me.
All is
Mute.
........
What is that I hear?  Do you hear the sunlight fall upon the
iridescent leaves?

  "Run child!  Deep into the trees.  Wait there for me!  I'll arrive presently!"

Night secludes mine eyes.
I am covered in a black mist...speak not,
for he will find you.

Let him search, for I am gone,
Swallowed by darkness.*

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~ Alysia*

© Copyright 1999 Alysia - All Rights Reserved
Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
1 posted 1999-06-26 08:18 PM


We all gladly welcome you to our fold
I personally like your style - Your use of archaic language will surely find some followers here - and your message is delivered quite adeptly through your repeated use of personification... I like it... Do make yourself comfy here



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Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
2 posted 1999-06-26 08:21 PM


I like the style and the content of your poem! Feels as though I should read it whilst listening to harpsicord music!

Welcome to the group (the family really). I look forward to more from you.


Alysia
Junior Member
since 1999-06-26
Posts 35
american falls, idaho usa
3 posted 1999-06-26 08:38 PM


To both of you...thanks. I look forward to posting more, as time permits.

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~ Alysia*

Christina Myers
Member
since 1999-06-21
Posts 159

4 posted 1999-06-26 10:20 PM


yes, I concur- this is a lovely show of writing... something utterly timeless about it...I can almost imagine the faery queen and her followers hiding in the trees...
even if that wasn't your intention

-C

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And I thought: this is how poetry is born. It comes from invisible heights, it is secret and dark in its origins, solitary and fragrant, and like the river it will assimilate whatever falls in its current; it will seek a route between the mountains, and its crystalline song will ripple through the meadows."- Pablo Neruda

Alysia
Junior Member
since 1999-06-26
Posts 35
american falls, idaho usa
5 posted 1999-06-28 09:48 PM


Christina,
Fabulous thought. Even though I never even imagined such life living in my poem, now as I read it again, it does exist. Fairies are so magical and hidden, that it almost takes my poem to a deeper forest of imagination and thought. Thanks for opening my eyes to that!

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~ Alysia*

jfreak
Member
since 1999-06-17
Posts 306
Yuma, AZ, USA
6 posted 1999-06-29 12:50 PM


You are definately gifted. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. You are a great poet.

Jfreak

Alysia
Junior Member
since 1999-06-26
Posts 35
american falls, idaho usa
7 posted 1999-06-29 01:30 PM


*blush* thanks jfreak. might i add that you're poetry is also quite intriguing...continue to post it!
Alysia
Junior Member
since 1999-06-26
Posts 35
american falls, idaho usa
8 posted 1999-06-29 01:30 PM


*blush* thanks jfreak. might i add that you're poetry is also quite intriguing...continue to post it!

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~ Alysia*

Tim
Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794

9 posted 1999-06-29 02:09 PM


Me thinkst thou art a maiden fair
Who speaks with beauty and grand flair....

WhenDovesCry
Junior Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 16
California, USA
10 posted 1999-06-29 08:34 PM


Alysia...
I love the style...it draws you in...a whole little world is created as you read...I love it...

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