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ac
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since 06-17-99
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Cayey, PR - USA


0 posted 06-26-99 12:15 PM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for ac



Don't turn around,
and look at me...
there are shades and shadows,
you shouldn't see...

Close that book,
don't turn that page...
forget it's title,
loose your place...

Disregard the images,
of what I did..
you've seen too much
of what I hid...

Don't ask more questions,
I've said too much...
There are parts of me,
you shouldn't touch...

Don't come near me,
or get to close...
There's nothing here,
you'd want to know...

And don't caress me,
don't linger on my skin...
Cuz I just don't want you,
to reach within...
© Copyright 1999 ac - All Rights Reserved
Christina Myers
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since 06-21-99
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1 posted 06-26-99 12:19 PM       View Profile for Christina Myers   Email Christina Myers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Christina Myers's Home Page   View IP for Christina Myers

wow! this is excellent! A different perspective that is hardly expressed so..completely. Bravo.

-C
Krystal
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since 06-19-99
Posts 145
Shelton,WA USA


2 posted 06-26-99 06:31 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

I was really impressed by this. Great job! I'm glad you posted it here...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
Alysia
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since 06-26-99
Posts 35
american falls, idaho usa


3 posted 06-26-99 08:50 PM       View Profile for Alysia   Email Alysia   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alysia

Ahhh. You speak for my heart. I felt as if my tongue was stinging as the last word dropped onto it and lingered there until I swallowed relived pain. Excellent.

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~ Alysia*
ac
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since 06-17-99
Posts 132
Cayey, PR - USA


4 posted 06-26-99 11:20 PM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Thank you Alysia, Krystal and Christina. I was unsure about posting it here, it's a little dark, but now I'm glad I did. I'm flattered that you liked it...

[This message has been edited by ac (edited 06-26-99).]

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Balladeer
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5 posted 06-27-99 12:28 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

wonderful work, ac. Many people would be happier accepting people at face value. Everyone has a hidden side that should remain just that. I like your style.
ac
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6 posted 06-27-99 09:51 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Thank you Balladeer, sometimes even when you give yourself completely, there are certain things you just need to keep entirely to yourself...of course not everyone understands this need...
Fred Hobbs
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since 06-08-99
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7 posted 06-28-99 09:04 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

ac,

Nice poem! Doesn't seem too dark to me at all. Just sounds like your establishing boundaries.

sandman
Moonlight
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since 06-25-99
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Auburn, Alabama USA


8 posted 06-28-99 10:06 PM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

Very nice!

~m~
ac
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since 06-17-99
Posts 132
Cayey, PR - USA


9 posted 06-29-99 02:43 PM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Thank you Fred and Moonlight...it is establishing boundaries afterall there are some things that are better left unsaid..
Andrew Scott
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since 06-24-99
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Redlands,CA,USA


10 posted 06-29-99 04:27 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Very strong. I like this one alot!
But for all the narrator's demands, I felt the one they were directed towards kept coming closer. That in the end there was nothing that would deter the person from finding the heart within. (Its just the way it struck me.) Thanks for the read. I bow to you.
Krystal
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since 06-19-99
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Shelton,WA USA


11 posted 06-29-99 04:43 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

ac... You say it's a little dark. I loved it, personally. I also think that dark and light co-exist... there cannot be one without the other! I write a lot of dark stuff, too, but I hope that, like yours, it still inspires and touches. This really touched me.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
ac
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Cayey, PR - USA


12 posted 06-30-99 10:29 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Andrew, yes you're right, this was meant for a particularly persistent one...and Krystal, I'm glad you liked it, I guess most everyone feels this way at one time or another...thanks...
Nimrod the Hunter
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13 posted 06-30-99 03:42 PM       View Profile for Nimrod the Hunter   Email Nimrod the Hunter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nimrod the Hunter

Hi ac, I know this feeling. It happens to me sometimes, like I make a mistake and I have two parents to correct me, and I only want one to correct me instead of two. Same thing, if I have learned once on my own, then I'm afraid of someone correcting me all over again. Or I'm afraid of someone seeing something in me that's so wrong.

I don't know if I've said anything right here, but it's just an assumption I understand something related to your poem.
ac
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since 06-17-99
Posts 132
Cayey, PR - USA


14 posted 06-30-99 04:56 PM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

No, you're about right...it is about being afraid of people seeing that human side that makes mistakes and is sometimes wrong...the fear of having the light shine upon your nakedness and your vulnerability and your past (sins and all)....Thanks for your insight Nimrod the Hunter...

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elvira
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since 07-06-99
Posts 985
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15 posted 07-16-99 02:39 AM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

the fear of intimacy...makes for lovely poetry

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Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart...


ac
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since 06-17-99
Posts 132
Cayey, PR - USA


16 posted 07-16-99 10:09 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Thank you...
snuffleupagus
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since 07-15-99
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17 posted 07-16-99 04:04 PM       View Profile for snuffleupagus   Email snuffleupagus   Edit/Delete Message     View IP for snuffleupagus

*applause*...very good.

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"You cannot roll with me," said the Big O, "but perhaps you can roll by yourself."
-Shel Silverstein
blueloon
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since 07-07-99
Posts 166
NY


18 posted 07-16-99 05:33 PM       View Profile for blueloon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for blueloon

One's only defence is themselves. If you don't defend yourself no one else will. I truely liked every word that you wrote for it echoed much truth.
blueloon
Kate
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since 07-02-99
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19 posted 07-16-99 06:44 PM       View Profile for Kate   Email Kate   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kate

I understand where you're coming from. Even if a person appears strong there is always a hidden weakness that they hug to them and hide.
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


20 posted 07-16-99 07:06 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Wow....good one. I have felt that way numerous times before
azblond
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since 07-01-99
Posts 651
The Steamy Desert


21 posted 07-16-99 07:39 PM       View Profile for azblond   Email azblond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for azblond

There's so much I could say...
But won't
Oh what the heck...simply put-I liked
Don't!

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For sometimes when the Darkness falls, we must surrender, take what is ours, and give what we can, and always remember love is somewhere waiting...


ac
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since 06-17-99
Posts 132
Cayey, PR - USA


22 posted 07-19-99 09:17 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Thanks guys for all your comments... I'm glad you enjoyed and i'm even more relieved that it's not just me who prefers to keep some things in the dark...
Saxoness
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since 07-18-99
Posts 1176
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23 posted 07-19-99 10:19 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

I don't know you.......but somehow, you knew me very well. Being a poet, it still amazes me how wonderful the art can be.......how a mere pen can uncover what nothing else can. Thank you for this peice, it is poets like you we all strive to be.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot
Saxoness
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24 posted 07-19-99 10:22 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

by the way........i would like to speak with you, if you have ICQ or im, let me know on one of my poems
 
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