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Solemn Child

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Krystal
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0 posted 06-24-99 05:14 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Krystal

They say she is a solemn child,
They say she hardly ever smiles;
yet they never asked her why,
They don't see the tears she cries.

She can only pretend she's happy with life,
All the while, holding hands with strife;
All her trust has been stolen away,
And to receive love she's had to pay

With her entire body and mind.

But they're not aware this time
That she pays for a twisted crime;
They're not aware of the fear it breeds,
Or of the pain planted inside like seeds;

No, they only see a solemn child's face
That no happiness can ever erase.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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doreen peri
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1 posted 06-24-99 05:56 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Well, you really got me into this... I'm so concerned about this child and what happened to her. To evoke empathy is one of the purposes of poetry. Keep posting!
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Afraid I have to agree with Doreen. I, too, am intrigued. A sequel, or continuation, would be welcome. Whaddayasay???
Krystal
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3 posted 06-24-99 06:28 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Thank you Doreen....your insight and comments are appreciated!

Balladeer.... hmmm, is that a challenge? I will have to work on it! May take me awhile, I am actually still trying to find out what's happening to that child! Give me some time... I'm glad you read and responded. I always love hearing from you.

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Wolfgang
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4 posted 06-24-99 07:30 PM       View Profile for Wolfgang   Email Wolfgang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wolfgang's Home Page   View IP for Wolfgang

It's very sad when any kind of suffering is ignored by society but even sadder when we ignore the suffering of a child.
You did a commendable job with your poem to remind all of us.
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5 posted 06-24-99 08:18 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Children are often overlooked. You swear in front of a child and the next time you hear the child speaking, they are using your words. If a child is anxious, fidgety, unruly, he/she is often thought to be hyperactive. If a child is quiet, withdrawn, he/she is thought to be shy. But behind the facade there may be real emotional problems; problems caused by the adults around them. No child should have to live this way! I suggest we all open our minds when dealing with children..don't see just the facade, see the child!
Krystal
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6 posted 06-24-99 09:59 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Thank you guys, for reading and responding, and for your kind comments!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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Tibesti
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7 posted 06-24-99 11:01 PM       View Profile for Tibesti   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tibesti

nicely done - consistently in the abstract makes it general and aethereal
Krystal
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8 posted 06-25-99 12:40 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Tibesti...
Thank you! Nice to see you here...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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Tequilia_Sunrise
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good write
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