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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
They say she is a solemn child, They say she hardly ever smiles; yet they never asked her why, They don't see the tears she cries. She can only pretend she's happy with life, All the while, holding hands with strife; All her trust has been stolen away, And to receive love she's had to pay With her entire body and mind. But they're not aware this time That she pays for a twisted crime; They're not aware of the fear it breeds, Or of the pain planted inside like seeds; No, they only see a solemn child's face That no happiness can ever erase. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Well, you really got me into this... I'm so concerned about this child and what happened to her. To evoke empathy is one of the purposes of poetry. Keep posting! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Afraid I have to agree with Doreen. I, too, am intrigued. A sequel, or continuation, would be welcome. Whaddayasay??? |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Thank you Doreen....your insight and comments are appreciated! Balladeer.... hmmm, is that a challenge? I will have to work on it! May take me awhile, I am actually still trying to find out what's happening to that child! Give me some time... I'm glad you read and responded. I always love hearing from you. ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Wolfgang Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 124Hamilton, Ont. Canada |
It's very sad when any kind of suffering is ignored by society but even sadder when we ignore the suffering of a child. You did a commendable job with your poem to remind all of us. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Children are often overlooked. You swear in front of a child and the next time you hear the child speaking, they are using your words. If a child is anxious, fidgety, unruly, he/she is often thought to be hyperactive. If a child is quiet, withdrawn, he/she is thought to be shy. But behind the facade there may be real emotional problems; problems caused by the adults around them. No child should have to live this way! I suggest we all open our minds when dealing with children..don't see just the facade, see the child! |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Thank you guys, for reading and responding, and for your kind comments! ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Tibesti New Member
since 1999-06-24
Posts 6New York, NY, USA |
nicely done - consistently in the abstract makes it general and aethereal |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Tibesti... Thank you! Nice to see you here... ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
good write |
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