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Me, Lloyd, and the Cosmic Void

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 06-24-99 01:20 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

There is a big black hole opening up in my bedroom wall.
My closet door cannot keep me from a bottomless fall.
There goes my dog and, oh great, there goes my cat.
Teacher won’t believe where my homework is at.
This thing happened to my closest friend Lloyd.
That poor guy got sucked into a cosmic void.
And not a soul has seen him since that day.
I think that I would like to keep it that way!
All of those scary stories must be true.
If mom was here what would she do?
She’d say, “That’s the way it goes.”
She'd at least scratch my nose.
As this poem is getting dumb.
Fingers are becoming numb.
Not much longer I’ll hold on.
Miss me while I am gone.
Oh noooooooooo!
Gotta gooooo.
(Sigh)
Bye

[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-24-99).]



[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 08-26-99).]
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owen
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1 posted 06-24-99 02:19 AM       View Profile for owen   Email owen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit owen's Home Page   View IP for owen

Trippy is good. I once got stuck in a cosmic void, then I got a divorced.

owen
Nan
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2 posted 06-24-99 10:35 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

I love fun and silly poems.....
doreen peri
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3 posted 06-24-99 12:10 PM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Ditto Nan.
You be the man!
Cool little song.
Not too long.
Liked how the woids
drift to cosmic voids.
Balladeer
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4 posted 06-24-99 02:37 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

That's way out, Walt. If poetry is a combination of imagination and innovation, I'd say you struck the bullseye dead square! Very enjoyable. Thanks!
Krystal
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5 posted 06-24-99 03:56 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Nice work! I really enjoyed the staggered words... that was a refreshing change of pace from the ordinary! Fun, too. Thanks for sharing it with us.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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6 posted 08-22-99 08:04 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

I liked this one, rought a to my face.
aziza
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7 posted 06-20-2007 02:40 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

I love the title and the poem remains funny - even years later.

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