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The Ragdoll

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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 06-23-99 09:36 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for wayoutwalt

The ragdoll layed with the other on the bed
The little girl chose the other instead
The ragdoll looked at itself and knew why
It's body was dirty it was missing an eye

The new doll could wet it even could talk
If it felt so it could get up and walk
Or the doll sitting there just being cute
Was more than the ragdoll had as a mute

But when the new doll broke on its first day
The ragdoll knew nothing that it could say
To ease the frown on the little girl's face
It knew she needed something to embrace

Take me! Oh, Take me! I'm right over here
Down the girl's cheek ran a shimmering tear
The little girl hugged the ragdoll for awhile
Both spirits were lifted on both faces a smile.


© Copyright 1999 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
Christina Myers
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1 posted 06-23-99 10:22 AM       View Profile for Christina Myers   Email Christina Myers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Christina Myers's Home Page   View IP for Christina Myers

I could actually visualize this poem.. very good example of showing not telling (yes, I've been in too many creative writing classes)....made me miss my old torn up bedpals of yesteryear..mine wasn't a rag doll- but a beat up big purple bunny!
Saxoness
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2 posted 07-22-99 12:13 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

way to go.....i can see why you are so proud of this one. great imagery.........brings back memories. thanks for sharing it.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Gentle Soul
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3 posted 07-22-99 12:55 AM       View Profile for Gentle Soul   Email Gentle Soul   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gentle Soul

Oh walt.. I love it.. it put tears in my eyes.. such a great poem!! so Real!! I love it!!!

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Princess Lily
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4 posted 07-22-99 01:00 AM       View Profile for Princess Lily   Email Princess Lily   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Princess Lily

One word-WONDERFUL!!
this is great.i could actually see this happening as i read it.

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We see only what we want to see~unless perhaps~we believe


DreamEvil
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5 posted 07-22-99 01:02 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Keep this up and we're gonna hold you to this standard, all the time.
Moonlight
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6 posted 07-22-99 02:36 AM       View Profile for Moonlight   Email Moonlight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Moonlight's Home Page   View IP for Moonlight

what a great subject! good story great poem, walt!
Dragon
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7 posted 07-22-99 02:43 AM       View Profile for Dragon   Email Dragon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dragon

Way to go Walt! Terrific!!

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cruz
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8 posted 10-29-2000 12:55 AM       View Profile for cruz   Email cruz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for cruz

This litter girl realized that she had a real doll and she almosts begins to neglect her.  Reminds me of Ragedy Ann and Andy!
 
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