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Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
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Coastal Texas

0 posted 1999-06-22 07:39 PM


Sixty-three eyes stare.

Bobby Turner has a big white patch
over one where a baseball hit him
yesterday that everyone wants to
look under, even Bobby.

I feel my cheeks burn.
Everywhere I look I see eyes.

Except when I look at Bobby,
then I see one eye and a big white patch.
Maybe he has a patch on to keep his
eyeball from rolling out of his head
onto the floor.
Ick.

The floor is dusty and tiled and hard.
My heels hurt and my palms are wet.
Mrs. Bixby clears her throat.

It sounds like my Mom
trying to drive Dad's car.
He calls it a standard.
Mom calls it other things.

I just said one of those things
when I walked in six minutes late
to Mrs. Bixby's home room
after I looked down and discovered
that I had no clothes on.
So now sixty three eyes
(and a big white patch)
stare at me in amazement.

I think that something besides a ball hit Bobby.
He gets angry and blushes when the other
kids ask him.
I don't think I will.

My Mom is gonna be mad
because she has to drive up here in
Dad's car to pick me up.
I swear I had clothes on when she dropped
me off this morning.
I'm almost positive.
I think I just said another word.


Alicat




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Le Jongleur Aspirante




[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-22-99).]

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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
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1 posted 1999-06-22 07:51 PM


this is such a fitting title.... I think..

Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
2 posted 1999-06-22 10:06 PM


hee hee hee hee....
Ok Alicat......You go from one extreme to the next. I love it!!! Still laughing here...I hope this was a nightmare....or a fantasy. Oh my! hee hee.

Balladeer
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3 posted 1999-06-22 10:23 PM


One never knows what's coming. Cool and refreshing.
Mr_Squint
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since 1999-06-27
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Bankstown, New South Wales, Australia
4 posted 1999-07-22 05:54 AM


Heh heh heh!!! -> It's great to see another new and original topic that breaks away from the rest! => I loved your poem and wish that you're poetic career will be a long and lasting one!!!

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A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!!

Starfish
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since 1999-07-20
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New Zealand
5 posted 1999-07-22 05:59 AM


This is one of the best narrative poems I have read in a long time. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
Saxoness
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since 1999-07-18
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6 posted 1999-07-22 09:24 AM


I'm still laughing, great job

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot


Alicat
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094
Coastal Texas
7 posted 1999-07-22 03:45 PM


Thanks everyone for not only reading and responding, but also for enjoying this one and digging deeps within pages of posts to find it...there's more back there for the intrepid soul who craves adventure.

Alicat

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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Florida
8 posted 1999-07-22 04:28 PM


Love it!! Want more want more!
Munda
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since 1999-10-08
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The Hague, The Netherlands
9 posted 2000-03-05 11:57 AM


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