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Alicat
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0 posted 06-22-99 07:39 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alicat

Sixty-three eyes stare.

Bobby Turner has a big white patch
over one where a baseball hit him
yesterday that everyone wants to
look under, even Bobby.

I feel my cheeks burn.
Everywhere I look I see eyes.

Except when I look at Bobby,
then I see one eye and a big white patch.
Maybe he has a patch on to keep his
eyeball from rolling out of his head
onto the floor.
Ick.

The floor is dusty and tiled and hard.
My heels hurt and my palms are wet.
Mrs. Bixby clears her throat.

It sounds like my Mom
trying to drive Dad's car.
He calls it a standard.
Mom calls it other things.

I just said one of those things
when I walked in six minutes late
to Mrs. Bixby's home room
after I looked down and discovered
that I had no clothes on.
So now sixty three eyes
(and a big white patch)
stare at me in amazement.

I think that something besides a ball hit Bobby.
He gets angry and blushes when the other
kids ask him.
I don't think I will.

My Mom is gonna be mad
because she has to drive up here in
Dad's car to pick me up.
I swear I had clothes on when she dropped
me off this morning.
I'm almost positive.
I think I just said another word.


Alicat




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Le Jongleur Aspirante




[This message has been edited by Alicat (edited 06-22-99).]
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Nan
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1 posted 06-22-99 07:51 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

this is such a fitting title.... I think..
Sally S.
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2 posted 06-22-99 10:06 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

hee hee hee hee....
Ok Alicat......You go from one extreme to the next. I love it!!! Still laughing here...I hope this was a nightmare....or a fantasy. Oh my! hee hee.
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3 posted 06-22-99 10:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

One never knows what's coming. Cool and refreshing.
Mr_Squint
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4 posted 07-22-99 05:54 AM       View Profile for Mr_Squint   Email Mr_Squint   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mr_Squint's Home Page   View IP for Mr_Squint

Heh heh heh!!! -> It's great to see another new and original topic that breaks away from the rest! => I loved your poem and wish that you're poetic career will be a long and lasting one!!!

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A mailman was mailing mailmen to other mailmen so these mailmen could mail these mailmen in a mail truck that didn't mail mail but mailed men!!!
Starfish
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5 posted 07-22-99 05:59 AM       View Profile for Starfish   Email Starfish   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starfish

This is one of the best narrative poems I have read in a long time. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
Saxoness
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6 posted 07-22-99 09:24 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

I'm still laughing, great job

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Alicat
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7 posted 07-22-99 03:45 PM       View Profile for Alicat   Email Alicat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alicat

Thanks everyone for not only reading and responding, but also for enjoying this one and digging deeps within pages of posts to find it...there's more back there for the intrepid soul who craves adventure.

Alicat
Nicole
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8 posted 07-22-99 04:28 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Love it!! Want more want more!
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