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Taken Too Soon

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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 06-22-99 01:35 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

At seventeen, her life was new and just beginning,
A girlish flower blossoming into a succulent rose.
Her raging dreams were starting to take wing,
And she lived each day like it was part of a masterful prose.

The mistakes of her childhood had melted away,
Replaced by a woman of great wits and word.
Her world grew more fulfilling day by day,
Learning great lessons and discovering the truths of which she'd heard.

When graduation day came, she was a grace at the head of the class,
And when college rolled around, she excelled so brilliantly.
So when she entered the real world, confident and filled with sass,
She found that she could indeed be whatever she chose to be.

At twenty six a handsome man swept her off her feet,
And two years later her baby girl entered the world.
As her family grew to four, her career never missed a beat,
Until on her thirtieth birthday, all became unfurled.

She could scarce believe it when the doctor called
And told her the earth shattering news.
For who would belive that her sickness that started last fall
Could be cancer, surely this must be a horrific ruse.

Her heart sunk to the cold, tiled floor,
And she wept for all she would miss.
The doctor said she had maybe six months, definitely not more,
Before an early death will place it's cruel kiss.

She wept again as she was forced to give up a career she adored,
But she remained so brave, even through the worst.
In her final weeks, she devoted herself to the lord,
And continued to be strong, though at times she thought she'd burst.

Although she'd never done anything in her life that was truly grand,
Her death was sadly mourned by her shocked family and friends.
They so kindly spoke of all the good things she had done on this mortal land,
They said she was taken all too soon, and the heart's of those she
touched may never mend.

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*Krista Knutson*
© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Ron
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1 posted 06-22-99 07:06 AM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

You've captured an important (though frustrating) Truth in this lovely poem. Life is many things, but not always just. And still, in spite of the injustice (and though we do nothing "grand"), we can and often do make a real difference...

Great job!

Ron
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2 posted 08-20-99 11:03 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Alwye, This was way to good to be buried so deep, with so few responses. Great job writing about such a sad event.
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3 posted 08-20-99 11:24 AM       View Profile for Majere   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majere

I agree with Lost Dreamer, this deserves to be read again, and again.

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4 posted 08-20-99 06:03 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I thought you did a beautiful job, and with such a sad subject. Life just don't seem fair sometimes...
I am surprised it hasn't had more comments than this!
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5 posted 08-20-99 06:12 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Well, it sure got by me the first time. Thanks for bringing it back.

Poetic storytelling...there's nothing better and you do it very well, alwye.
Fred Hobbs
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6 posted 08-20-99 09:47 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

I missed it too Alwye. It's easy to do here on the interstate of poetry. But you poem is beautiful and touching and deserves to be seen again.

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7 posted 08-20-99 10:09 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you all very much!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

Dark Angel
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8 posted 08-29-99 07:20 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Very sad and very moving.I agree this should be read again.
IsabelleSkye
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9 posted 08-29-99 09:35 AM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

Wow! this was really a heartbreaker.
:/ I.Skye
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wonderful job...touched my soul...excuse me while I regain my composure....
Alwye
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Thank you all for your kind words.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


Kelly
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12 posted 08-30-99 01:58 AM       View Profile for Kelly   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kelly

Thanks Alwye. It was a little hard for me to read. My mom died of cancer at a young age. She only lived 2 months after finding out she had cancer. This one really hit home for me. Thanks again.
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13 posted 08-30-99 03:30 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Beautifully said...

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


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14 posted 08-30-99 10:41 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I liked it a lot, Alwye, the woman in your poem is not the only one that was "taken too soon"...

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

Alwye
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15 posted 08-30-99 08:50 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

All to many are taken too soon from us...thank you all for your kindess.

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


 
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