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Krystal
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since 06-19-99
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0 posted 06-21-99 04:08 AM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Krystal

If only you knew of the destruction
You left in your wake;
It was in my heart to give,
But your motive was to take.

Like a hurricane
Ripping through my heart,
you tore everything solid down,
Leaving me to make a new start.

Like a tornado
On some southwestern plain,
You tore my world apart,
Slowly driving me insane.

Like a tidal wave bent on destruction,
you tossed me upon some lonely shore;
Deserted again, like some
Undiscovered treasure on a deep ocean floor.

Come back, I plead,
Undo all this damage you've done;
Like a hapless fly, I was caught
In the web of deception you'd spun.

Now I struggle to re-construct
The pieces of my life, shard by shard,
That you so mercilessly broke apart,
As you disassembled my heart.


...to Chris...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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© Copyright 1999 Krystal - All Rights Reserved
chris
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since 06-23-99
Posts 33
rowlett, texas, usa


1 posted 06-25-99 12:58 PM       View Profile for chris   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chris

please don't judge me by my name!

you've captured what i've tried so many times to. the pain that one can inflict on another is devastating. thank you for letting
me know that there are others that have been hurt so deeply, but still find the strength to go on. i know i have
Krystal
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Posts 145
Shelton,WA USA


2 posted 06-25-99 01:44 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Thanks, Chris...
And don't worry, I won't judge you by your name! :-)

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
invertigo18
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since 06-14-99
Posts 53
Prairieville, LA., USA


3 posted 06-25-99 02:32 PM       View Profile for invertigo18   Email invertigo18   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for invertigo18

Excellent choice of words. The best part of it I think is the part about the web of deception. I enjoyed that most. Overall its wonderful though.

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Luke Cakalic
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since 06-21-99
Posts 19
Ogden, Utah, USA


4 posted 06-25-99 03:58 PM       View Profile for #5 PS   Email #5 PS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for #5 PS

Good rhyme and meaning, I really like the "come back to me" poems, very heart felt...



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Krystal
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since 06-19-99
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Shelton,WA USA


5 posted 06-25-99 08:47 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Invertigo 18... Thank you, and I'm glad you let me know what you like, it helps me when others point out what they like the most!

#5... Thanks so very much! Glad to hear from you... :-)

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
Fred Hobbs
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since 06-08-99
Posts 353
Tallahassee, Florida, US


6 posted 06-25-99 09:40 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Krystal,

Good job! This is excellent. It is Chris' misfortune that he has chosen to neglect a woman so passionate.

And...Thanks for liking "Old Cop."

sandman
Krystal
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since 06-19-99
Posts 145
Shelton,WA USA


7 posted 06-26-99 06:21 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Wow!! Thanks, Fred! I'm glad you think so...
And you're welcome for the comments about
"Old Cop"... but it was my pleasure to read such a work of art! :-)

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
elvira
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since 07-06-99
Posts 985
California


8 posted 07-19-99 06:13 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

the "stormy weather" of love...*sigh*

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Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart...


Rita
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since 07-19-99
Posts 56
Danville Va. 24540


9 posted 07-19-99 06:15 PM       View Profile for Rita   Email Rita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Rita

I can really relate! Great poem!!
Krystal
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since 06-19-99
Posts 145
Shelton,WA USA


10 posted 07-19-99 09:50 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Elvira... thank you.

Rita... thanks, but it's sad that you can relate. I hope you've found respite from the storm.



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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
aziza
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since 07-09-2006
Posts 3000
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!


11 posted 05-31-2007 02:38 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

I loved "Like a hurricane ...", "Like a tornado ...", "Like a tidal wave ..."

How could I not be caught in the whirling vortex of the weather?

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