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It's Not Safe

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Krystal
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0 posted 06-21-99 04:00 AM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Krystal

I know you mean well,
But please hold your questions, it's not
safe;
And I don't want to lie to you. Yes,
My emotions are raw, my skin is chafed--

But don't ask,
Just accept me as I am,
Me in the pretty mask,
With he who doesn't give a damn.

It's all okay,
Believe me when I say I'll be alright;
Please don't talk to me that way,
I have no energy to explain all night.

Thank you for your concern,
It means a lot to know you care;
But I can't talk to you...
Can't you see the rage in his stare?

I'll be okay if no one is there.

I know you want to know,
I know you mean well;
But please hold your questions, it's not
safe;
And if he pushed me down,
I'd tell you that I fell.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

To all victims of domestic violence everywhere, in hopes that the courage you possess helps you to find safety.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
© Copyright 1999 Krystal - All Rights Reserved
Christina Myers
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1 posted 06-23-99 10:57 PM       View Profile for Christina Myers   Email Christina Myers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Christina Myers's Home Page   View IP for Christina Myers

a lovely poem dealing with a harsh issue..
just another reminder of why I enjoy poetry so much.
I loved the emotional buildup to the line you set aside and by itself:
"I'll be okay if no one is there"

and the ending... brilliance.

-Christina
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2 posted 06-23-99 11:00 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

If he pushed me down, I'd tell you that I fell......how incredibly powerful!!!!Wonderful job.
Krystal
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Shelton,WA USA


3 posted 06-24-99 12:17 AM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Christina and Balladeer...
Thank you both very much for your thoughtful comments! I appreciate it...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
DreamEvil
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4 posted 06-24-99 01:23 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Captivating piece,I found quite moving.
Joyfulltune
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5 posted 06-24-99 09:14 AM       View Profile for Joyfulltune   Email Joyfulltune   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Joyfulltune

this is so very true. it's hard for others to emphathetic in those situations. you bring the feeling of fear in nicely. good job.
Krystal
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6 posted 06-24-99 03:48 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Thank you both very much for taking the time to read, and for your wonderful comments! Very much appreciated...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
wayoutwalt
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7 posted 06-26-99 12:57 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

very nice i can appreciate it well you have a gift
Poet deVine
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8 posted 06-26-99 09:57 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I can see her cowering looks through your poetry. This is a great poem! You've given voice to someone who can't speak up!

Do you know if there's a site specifically for poetry for/about battered/abused women? If not, perhaps this is something to start?

ac
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9 posted 06-26-99 11:44 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

This is so strong in evoking the images we sometimes don't see...I've been here before and I've looked through these eyes and I too have repeated that mantra..."Don't worry I'm alright"
Nan
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10 posted 06-26-99 04:55 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Safety is absolutely the concern - This is such an important aspect in escaping domestic violence. Well-meaning friends and relatives need to understand that dilemma. Thanks for bringing this issue to light -
Still, the victims of abuse must help themselves and find a way out...
Krystal
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11 posted 06-26-99 06:08 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Nan,
I agree with you completely! Thanks for your comments...and for taking the time to read this!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
Krystal
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12 posted 06-26-99 06:11 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Thanks to everyone else who commented on this poem, your comments are appreciated...

Poet deVine, yes there are several web sites
for women (and men) victims of domestic violence, but excellent suggestion! I just wish I could finish working on my own personal home page... Thanks for your comments. :-)

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
Krystal
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13 posted 06-26-99 06:13 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Poet deVine...

My apologies... I thought you meant websites for domestic violence victims. Now I see you mean POETRY for victims of Domestic Violence. I'm not sure about that, will have to check on that... but I agree, that would be a great thing to start! I am sure there are many, many people who express their experiences on paper, with poetry.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
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