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Under The Ashes

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Krystal
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0 posted 06-21-99 03:16 AM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Krystal

Why is it,
That when love's fire has turned dark,
Some people
Look under the ashes for just one spark?

Why is it,
When a lover's heart has turned to stone,
Some lonely people
Chip at it still, afraid of being alone?

Why is it,
When love's highs have turned to lows,
Some people
Follow the roller coaster wherever it goes?

Why is it,
When love's river has run dry,
Some people wait thirsty on its banks,
Sending wishes to the sky?

Why is it
That I sit here alone in the dark,
Looking under the ashes
For just one spark?


...dedicated to Chris...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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1 posted 06-21-99 11:23 AM       View Profile for #5 PS   Email #5 PS   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for #5 PS

I loved the poem, this one really made me think, about why it is that we still try to find something when all is lost or dead, and why it is we are (for the most part) terrified of being alone even though things have been so emotionally draining in the past...you captured the feeling of relentless pursuit of happiness and circles we run in the attempt to find it.


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2 posted 06-21-99 11:38 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Yes, we all do it. Sometimes, even finding the spark makes an ash out of us. Your poem is very touching and realistic, yet warm.
Krystal
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3 posted 06-21-99 06:16 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

#5... thank you for your thoughtful reply, and for taking the time to read my poetry. Your comments moved me.

Balladeer... thanks again for reading my work and for your insight and kind words!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
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4 posted 06-22-99 07:24 AM       View Profile for Ron   Email Ron   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ron's Home Page   View IP for Ron

I love the play of words across the page; and you've managed to use that playfulness to capture a powerful message. Well done!

Ron
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5 posted 06-22-99 08:21 AM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

Krystal,

I like the way u used repetition to make ur point. Well done...an easy read, but one that leaves u thinking...

~Genea
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