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Krystal
Member

since 1999-06-19

Posts 140
Shelton,WA USA

0 posted 1999-06-21 03:16 AM

Why is it,
That when love's fire has turned dark,
Some people
Look under the ashes for just one spark?

Why is it,
When a lover's heart has turned to stone,
Some lonely people
Chip at it still, afraid of being alone?

Why is it,
When love's highs have turned to lows,
Some people
Follow the roller coaster wherever it goes?

Why is it,
When love's river has run dry,
Some people wait thirsty on its banks,
Sending wishes to the sky?

Why is it
That I sit here alone in the dark,
Looking under the ashes
For just one spark?

...dedicated to Chris...

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

#5 PS
Junior Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 19
Ogden, Utah, USA

1 posted 1999-06-21 11:23 AM

I loved the poem, this one really made me think, about why it is that we still try to find something when all is lost or dead, and why it is we are (for the most part) terrified of being alone even though things have been so emotionally draining in the past...you captured the feeling of relentless pursuit of happiness and circles we run in the attempt to find it.

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#5 Poetic Society

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

2 posted 1999-06-21 11:38 AM

Yes, we all do it. Sometimes, even finding the spark makes an ash out of us. Your poem is very touching and realistic, yet warm.

Krystal
Member

since 1999-06-19

Posts 140
Shelton,WA USA

3 posted 1999-06-21 06:16 PM

#5... thank you for your thoughtful reply, and for taking the time to read my poetry. Your comments moved me.

Balladeer... thanks again for reading my work and for your insight and kind words!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

Ron

Administrator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-05-19

Posts 8669
Michigan, US

4 posted 1999-06-22 07:24 AM

I love the play of words across the page; and you've managed to use that playfulness to capture a powerful message. Well done!

Ron

Genea
Member

since 1999-06-15

Posts 321
USA

5 posted 1999-06-22 08:21 AM

Krystal,

I like the way u used repetition to make ur point. Well done...an easy read, but one that leaves u thinking...

~Genea

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