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Krystal
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 140
Shelton,WA USA

0 posted 1999-06-21 02:15 AM


Didn't I
Shower you with affection?
Didn't I
Offer every sweet confection?

Didn't I
Write you pretty love songs?
So tell me please...
Where did I go wrong?

Didn't I
Soothe away your pain?
Didn't I
Shelter you from the rain?

Didn't I
Declare my love every day?
So tell me please...
Why did you go away?

Didn't I
Tread softly in your dreams?
Didn't I
Mend our love at the seams?

Didn't I
Write you pretty love songs?
So tell me please...
Where did I go wrong?

Now I think I see,
The truth in front of me;
I loved you
More than you loved me...

Didn't I?


To Chris

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

© Copyright 1999 Krystal - All Rights Reserved
#5 PS
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since 1999-06-21
Posts 19
Ogden, Utah, USA
1 posted 1999-06-21 04:01 PM


The more I read your poems the more I see the pain you are/were in, I like this one alot (along with all of your other ones)especially the last verse. I like repetitive poems that draw you into a daze and then smack you in the face at the end, great work!

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#5 Poetic Society

Krystal
Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140
Shelton,WA USA
2 posted 1999-06-21 06:11 PM


#5...Thank you for your insight, and for reading and responding. It means a lot, and your comments are very much appreciated!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

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