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Balladeer
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0 posted 1999-06-20 10:40 PM


Dear Mister editor;

I found an error in the news that I would like to mention
With hopes that you are kind enough to give it your attention,
For, on the page announcing deaths, I found it rather queer
That, though I searched from start to end, my name did not appear.

Although it is a small mistake, I feel, in my condition,
That I deserve at very least a little recognition.
I can't believe you didn't know that I had passed away.
You spelled the name right of my wife we buried yesterday.

Or did you think those left behind can just go right on living,
Faced with only emptiness and nothing left for giving?
Taken from the only thing that kept my heart alive,
How is it possible you'd think that I could still survive?

Your writers on the evening shift must have heard the sound
My torn heart made the moment that they placed her in the ground.
Perhaps they thought a cold wind rose and blew with icy breath
Instead of knowing it was me within the throes of death.

Now that I have done my best to bring this fact to light
I'm sure that you are willing to correct your oversight.
Tomorrow in the morning news, please try to tell my side
For, though I breathe, I feel as if I were the one who died.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Genea
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1 posted 1999-06-20 10:49 PM


Balladeer,

Very cool indeed!

~Genea

Poet deVine
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2 posted 1999-06-20 11:12 PM


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Tears, again, my friend...thank you for a lovely poem!

Sally S.
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since 1999-06-07
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Ohio
3 posted 1999-06-20 11:19 PM


sigh...
weep...
Oh, that did it.
sniffle.....
I warned you.....sigh.
You are a brilliant talent.
No words....

Balladeer
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4 posted 1999-06-20 11:27 PM


Thank you, Genea and Poet deVine

Sally..perhaps a nice chablis.........

Alwye
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In the space between moments
5 posted 1999-06-21 01:34 AM


Wow, excellent. So unique...how do you do it? Everyone of your poems are so unique and saturated with obvious talent....True pieces of great work.

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*Krista Knutson*

Dusk Treader
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6 posted 1999-06-21 01:39 AM


::sob:: Wow... completely awestruck... incredibly writing Balladeer...

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*Dusk Treader* pacing the path between dark and light.



Krystal
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since 1999-06-19
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7 posted 1999-06-21 02:09 AM


Oh my... I must agree ... INCREDIBLE WRITING!
How sad, but you pierce the heart of emotion.
Very well done! You are incredibly talented.

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")

sea_of_okc
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8 posted 1999-06-21 09:14 AM


Oh balladeer! sniffle, snuffle... heart-rending...
Balladeer
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9 posted 1999-06-21 10:45 AM


My overflowing thanks to all of you for your encouraging words.
Christina Myers
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10 posted 1999-06-21 07:02 PM


wonderful piece... reminscent of Natalie Merchant's "My Beloved Wife".... Balladeer you remind me of songs I like to sing. ;-)

I expected the piece to be about a poem or story getting ignored.. how nice to be pleasantly surprised. Bravo

"newbie"

Christina

ac
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11 posted 1999-06-21 07:40 PM


How do you do it... you're simply amazing...everytime I read one heart wrenching piece I figure it just couldn't possibly get better... I've never been so glad to be so wrong...ofcourse, with anything coming from you I should really know better...I must know are you married?...NO, don't tell me I couldn't bear more heartache...

[This message has been edited by ac (edited 06-21-99).]

Poet deVine
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12 posted 1999-07-16 01:09 AM




aziza
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13 posted 2007-05-31 02:02 AM


All I can think to say is

== Thank you. ==

A

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