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milt
Junior Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 18
whitley city ky usa

0 posted 1999-06-20 10:30 PM


Mid-night miseries
call to me
showing me things
I dare not see
Mid-night miseries
whispering in my mind
of the things
I've left behind
echoed voices in my head
telling me things
I fear and dread
I listen and listen
trying my best to escape
this twisted torment
yet I think I would miss it
if it were gone
for that would leave me
all alone....

© Copyright 1999 milt - All Rights Reserved
Sally S.
Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847
Ohio
1 posted 1999-06-20 11:29 PM


I like the concept of the poem. I read it a couple times through...it seems....well, am I missing the format(style)? I felt like the beginning flowed well then got lost. This could be a powerful poem.

Remember, I'm not an expert here. Just giving you my opinion.

milt
Junior Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 18
whitley city ky usa
2 posted 1999-06-21 11:59 AM


to sally
thanks for your opinion, and I promise when read in the right tones and speed it continues to flow, i appreciate the reply
ps. still learning this bbs don't know if I replied to you in the right procedure I just posted a reply myself, is that the way its done?

[This message has been edited by milt (edited 06-21-99).]

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