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tori
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 520
Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA

0 posted 1999-06-20 02:35 PM


I'm just a child who walked along the way
In the dark and vile night my youth just slipped away

Shadow called depression, a dark and dingy gray

Attacked by cultures expectations I fight for life to stay

I saw a life force glowing bright I watched it wash away

No place to find refuge, a spark of brighter day's

No longer do I hold them, I know not where they stay

Listening to the verdict who's web I now shall weave

Till dusk shall be departed and life no longer free

I am just a child who walked along the way

If you see my footsteps walk over where they lay

Find your path to walk in, and hope that you can stay

In empty space I linger, I cling to have reprieve

I am
just
a child
who
walked.


© Copyright 1999 Victoria Hosier/tori - All Rights Reserved
Sheila
Junior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 23
Lansing, Michigan, Ingham
1 posted 1999-06-20 03:02 PM


you are very good!! Life is such an unexpected journey of ups and downs that it can sometimes seem out of control, but just around the corner there's always a gift for staying on the ride!! Thanks for the poem
GG
Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532
Lost in thought
2 posted 2003-02-01 02:10 PM


went to open forum one
and this is still so true for.. so many.
I think it involves more than just walking though, but also fighting.

Enjoyed.
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Elie
Junior Member
since 2003-02-04
Posts 14
New York, USA
3 posted 2003-02-05 12:37 PM


Your poem reminded me of my life. It made me think of the innocence I still have.
I loved it.

Elie

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