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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 06-20-99 02:01 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

Silence echoes through a barren home,
As a mother stares filled with grief, in disbelief.
For was it not only a week ago,
That music played, children laughed, and her roses began to grow?


She paces cold, loveless halls in her nightgown of exquisite lace,
And thinks back upon a better time, a comforting and peaceful place.
Her lips even part into a bittersweet smile,
As she remembers how she first attracted him with her feminine wiles.

Their wedding was a fairytale of flowing silk and flowers,
Oh, and how at first they could talk away the hours.
The passion cooled as the years seemed to fly by,
But he was always there and never made her cry.

Two beautiful daughters graced their happy life,
Making a loving mother from a newlywed wife.
How she adored the family that she had made,
And she never suspected how her happiness would soon fade.

Her life took a turn for the worst one balmy spring night,
She was just too tired, not noticing when headlights roared into sight.
With a frightening crash the car violently overturned,
And when she awoke a month later, she was alone, she learned.

To know her family had not suffered was a small relief,
Oh, but how she now emptily stares in grief, in disbelief.
For was it not only a single week ago,
That in her life music played, children laughed, and her roses began to grow?

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*Krista Knutson*

Dusk Treader-- Thank you for the needed confession. I am hurt, but you are forgiven.


[This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 06-20-99).]
© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Krystal
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1 posted 06-21-99 06:37 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Oh ... how sad. This touched me, and you captured the story eloquently. Very good work!

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Shannon D. Montgomery
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2 posted 06-21-99 11:02 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is a very moving piece of work. So sad. So real.....
Alwye
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In the space between moments


3 posted 06-22-99 01:30 AM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Wow, thank you for the comments. I really appreciate it. To receive comments from two outstanding poets is really an honor..
Lost Dreamer
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4 posted 08-20-99 11:10 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Alwye, What a moving, and sad poem. I was drawn into it from the start. Great job!
Majere
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5 posted 08-20-99 11:19 AM       View Profile for Majere   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majere

Terribly sad, and bittersweet. Wonderful work.

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Such is the way to immortality ;)
Starith
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6 posted 08-22-99 01:46 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

Ouch! A knife just got stabbed into my heart...
Alwye
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7 posted 08-22-99 03:26 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you very much!!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood

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8 posted 08-22-99 04:00 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

You captured the sadness well.

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Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings?
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Ruby dagger
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9 posted 08-22-99 09:46 PM       View Profile for Ruby dagger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ruby dagger

I can't believe how much feeling you put into your work.

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Luv ya

Kelly

I'm no different than the average girl, my dreams wrap around the world. -Rebecca Lynn Howard
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10 posted 08-22-99 09:51 PM       View Profile for pen of passion   Email pen of passion   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for pen of passion

So sad.
Alwye
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Thank you all for your kind words. I appreciate it!

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*Krista Knutson*

I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller


aziza
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12 posted 06-20-2007 03:03 AM       View Profile for aziza   Email aziza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for aziza

There's nothing to say - this poem left me speechless.  It has so much in it .. so much emotion, a story that rocks my foundation - and I hope someone else opens it to read.  

Alison
 
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