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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Silence echoes through a barren home, As a mother stares filled with grief, in disbelief. For was it not only a week ago, That music played, children laughed, and her roses began to grow? She paces cold, loveless halls in her nightgown of exquisite lace, And thinks back upon a better time, a comforting and peaceful place. Her lips even part into a bittersweet smile, As she remembers how she first attracted him with her feminine wiles. Their wedding was a fairytale of flowing silk and flowers, Oh, and how at first they could talk away the hours. The passion cooled as the years seemed to fly by, But he was always there and never made her cry. Two beautiful daughters graced their happy life, Making a loving mother from a newlywed wife. How she adored the family that she had made, And she never suspected how her happiness would soon fade. Her life took a turn for the worst one balmy spring night, She was just too tired, not noticing when headlights roared into sight. With a frightening crash the car violently overturned, And when she awoke a month later, she was alone, she learned. To know her family had not suffered was a small relief, Oh, but how she now emptily stares in grief, in disbelief. For was it not only a single week ago, That in her life music played, children laughed, and her roses began to grow? ------------------ *Krista Knutson* Dusk Treader-- Thank you for the needed confession. I am hurt, but you are forgiven. [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 06-20-99).] |
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Krystal Member
since 1999-06-19
Posts 140Shelton,WA USA |
Oh ... how sad. This touched me, and you captured the story eloquently. Very good work! ------------------ Shannon D. Montgomery ("Krystal") |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is a very moving piece of work. So sad. So real..... |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, thank you for the comments. I really appreciate it. To receive comments from two outstanding poets is really an honor.. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Alwye, What a moving, and sad poem. I was drawn into it from the start. Great job! |
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Majere Junior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 32 |
Terribly sad, and bittersweet. Wonderful work. ------------------ Such is the way to immortality ;) |
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Starith Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 176Leesburg, FL USA |
Ouch! A knife just got stabbed into my heart... |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you very much!!  ------------------ *Krista Knutson* "If I could be an angel, I'd make your every wish come true. But I am only human, just a woman lovin' you..." Trisha Yearwood |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
You captured the sadness well. ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© |
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Ruby dagger Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 76Wyoming, MN, U.S.A |
I can't believe how much feeling you put into your work. ------------------ Luv ya Kelly I'm no different than the average girl, my dreams wrap around the world. -Rebecca Lynn Howard |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
So sad. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all for your kind words. I appreciate it! ------------------ *Krista Knutson* I see the world through the loving eyes of my heart, and suffer the pain of unfulfilled visions. -- Daniel L. Miller |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
There's nothing to say - this poem left me speechless. It has so much in it .. so much emotion, a story that rocks my foundation - and I hope someone else opens it to read. Alison |
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