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Mike
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0 posted 1999-06-19 09:30 PM


With voices of the nightingale, the bards they speak of love
Not with words of mortals, but thoughts from god's above
They speak of Helen's beauty, that launched a thousand ships
In vain I try to mimic, but speak with mortal lips
For I have met my Venus, she comes in still of night
Sweet flower of the heavens, outshines the welkin's light
I've supped her lips of rose' wine, caressed her in my arms
And tho' alas, a mortal be, have felt her goddess charms
Come to me my Dulcinea, thou beauty doth entwine
Entice me with your nectar sweet, with tastes of fragrant wine
Quench the yearnings deep inside, desires you instill
With pleasures of your satin bloom, mine passion cup you fill
Then softly steal into the night, amongst the rising mist
For I am thine, my heart doth feel, as if by heaven kissed.

© Copyright 1999 Mike - All Rights Reserved
JANNA
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1 posted 1999-06-19 09:51 PM


what a classically written piece of work. It feels like a timeless classic inthe present. Absolutely the best love poem I have read yet! Keep those coming!
Mike
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2 posted 1999-06-19 11:31 PM


Thank you for the kind comments Janna
Poet deVine
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3 posted 1999-06-19 11:38 PM


Hmmm shades of the Bard...excellent poem. Welcome to the group. Let's have more please!!!!!
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4 posted 1999-06-19 11:39 PM


gotta tell ya, Mike. This is better than good. the sentences are excellent, the meter is first class, the rhyme scheme is exact, and the vocabulary is top notch (other than that, it's a lousy poem). I can really admire someone who put this much effort into his work. Nice job!
Augchic711
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5 posted 1999-06-20 03:05 AM


Bravo Mike bravo!! This poem is a wonderful expression of true love! Thank you soooo much for sharing it with me! I look forward to your encore! More more please!

*******Augchic711*******

Nan
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6 posted 1999-06-20 09:19 AM


All righty, Mike - You make an entrance like that one, you know that we're looking for an equally good encore - and rest assured, there are many of us here who absolutely love this style of poetry...

Welcome Aboard!!


Mike
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7 posted 1999-06-20 04:00 PM


Thank you all for your kind welcome....
Allyn
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8 posted 1999-06-20 08:42 PM


I wish somebody would write me a love poem like this! I applaud you!
Tim
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9 posted 1999-07-15 11:39 AM


In a sonnet mood...
Sally S.
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10 posted 1999-07-15 12:42 PM


How lovely! Hmmmmm, I have to go talk to someone....I'm a little lovesick.
tori
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11 posted 1999-07-15 01:20 PM


A heart of a lover, the mind of a dreamer ...Brovo!!
I'm thinking..
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If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
vlh.

Alwye
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12 posted 1999-07-15 01:27 PM


Beautiful...simply beautiful.

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..And down from the eternal heavens comes fate's jeweled fingertips, it's magic flowing into awaiting souls..--Krista Knutson


*Krista Knutson*


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Hurricane Alley
13 posted 1999-07-17 03:18 PM


The 'creme' should be at the top!

hoot_owl_rn
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14 posted 1999-07-31 09:30 PM


How could I have missed this when it was posted, I'm not quite sure, but it was truly my loss. Wonderful work!
Mike
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15 posted 1999-08-01 11:34 AM


Thank you for nice comment Ms. Hoot
poetFemmeFatale
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16 posted 1999-08-13 12:41 PM


Aaahhh...now this is truly worth all my efforts. As most all knew, I was gone for nearly 10 days to the ocean, and knew I missed some good stuff! Here I am, scrolling back over nearly 20 pgs. that flew by while I was gone, and I find a masterpiece such as this....back to the top it goes, I agree with Balladeer, it's lousy if it weren't for all the perfection!! Beautiful ! ~ blowing kisses~

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet


Mike
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17 posted 1999-08-18 12:41 PM


Thank you kindly femmefatale.
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