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Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

0 posted 1999-06-18 10:24 PM

A tear of happiness once fell
From our dear Savior's eye
And left a cotton candy trail
Of clouds across the sky.

From them cascaded gentle showers
That fell to Earth below
And greened the grass and fathered flowers
And capped the hills with snow.

They filled the oceans, rivers, lakes
And painted upon high
With strokes a master artist makes
Bright rainbows in the sky.

A tear of anger also fell
From our dear Savior's eye
That left a thunder and lightning trail
Of clouds across the sky.

And, from these clouds, huge storms arose
Unleashing ice and hail
That echoed through the Earth below
Our Savior's mournful wail.

From his anger and his pain
Huge floods were given birth
And killer storms and hurricanes
Lashed out to punish Earth.

Are we living by God's plan?
Are his tears of rage or joy?
Will they bring rains befriending Man
Or otherwise destroy?

For your answer, search the skies
And please be kind to Him.
Our future lies in how He cries
And, buddy, I can't swim.

JANNA
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since 1999-06-18

Posts 51
arlington, tx usa

1 posted 1999-06-18 10:45 PM

Oh WOW! Your poems are amazing!! I haven't gotten to read that many of them yet, but it is obvious how truely talented you are. This one in particular spoke greatly to me, I can't wait to read the rest. I hope to be inspired by your work.

Genea
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since 1999-06-15

Posts 321
USA

2 posted 1999-06-19 12:05 PM

Balladeer,

I liked it all till the last line....just did not seem to fit with the rest of it. It's like the mood/tone of the last line doesn't jive with the rest.
Suggestion for last line: "And how we sing life's hymns."

Just a suggestion...the rest is great.
~Genea

ac
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since 1999-06-17

Posts 129
Cayey, PR - USA

3 posted 1999-06-19 11:57 AM

A really touching poem...again, something to make us think...and just like you, i worry too, because i as well can't swim...

Wintersurfer
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since 1999-06-14

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4 posted 1999-06-19 01:55 PM

I love it....all the way to the last drop! I like the mood twist at the end..very human.

Balladeer

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Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

5 posted 1999-06-19 04:20 PM

Thank you all for your nice comments. It's always interesting to note people's different reactions. It's one of the things that makes poetry a wonderful thing.

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

6 posted 1999-06-20 08:52 AM

Ya know, I can't even say that this is a bit of a change for you - every one of your poems shows another side of you -

Raven
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since 1999-06-14

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Hopewell Jct, New York, USA

7 posted 1999-06-20 02:19 PM

Yours is a poem I'll never forget, it's beautiful and powerful at the same time, you have a style that cannot be imitated, I'm just honored to be able to read it.

Balladeer

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8 posted 1999-06-20 03:48 PM

Na, Nan. My poems only show one side...the inside.

Raven...I am the one who is honored to have someone like you appreciate my efforts. Thank you........

elvira
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since 1999-07-06

Posts 936
California

9 posted 1999-07-22 03:02 AM

lovely...and a nice giggle at the end...no one does it better than you

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Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

10 posted 1999-07-22 08:57 AM

Balladeer, I'm glad this came to the forefront again for all to see...and I'm glad you treat Him with some humor, or else we would have to say "The devil made me do it!"

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Saxoness

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since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

11 posted 1999-07-22 09:07 AM

I'm begining to hunger for your work.......thank you for this, it was wondeful, I love the last line.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

12 posted 1999-07-22 12:11 PM

Balladeer...you out did yourself with this one. A wonderful piece and one of which you should be proud.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald

~one voice~
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since 1999-07-08

Posts 664
Billings, MT USA

13 posted 1999-07-22 01:30 PM

Balladeer, this one is very spiritual...and peaceful too. I love it!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Balladeer

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14 posted 1999-07-22 03:53 PM

My heartfelt thanks to you all. Thank you.

armanca
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 211
Tennessee

15 posted 1999-07-22 04:36 PM

fear not my buddy, who can't swim
it's here i give a helping limb. *Smile*

I loved that part...as i love your work

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20

Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

16 posted 1999-07-22 07:51 PM

Sir Balladeer, I keep thinking I've seen the best then another one comes along and throws me for a loop. I would say this is your best, but I know inside that self of yours we hav'nt seen anything yet.

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