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Our Saviour's Tears

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Balladeer
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0 posted 06-18-99 10:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer



A tear of happiness once fell
From our dear Savior's eye
And left a cotton candy trail
Of clouds across the sky.

From them cascaded gentle showers
That fell to Earth below
And greened the grass and fathered flowers
And capped the hills with snow.

They filled the oceans, rivers, lakes
And painted upon high
With strokes a master artist makes
Bright rainbows in the sky.

A tear of anger also fell
From our dear Savior's eye
That left a thunder and lightning trail
Of clouds across the sky.

And, from these clouds, huge storms arose
Unleashing ice and hail
That echoed through the Earth below
Our Savior's mournful wail.

From his anger and his pain
Huge floods were given birth
And killer storms and hurricanes
Lashed out to punish Earth.

Are we living by God's plan?
Are his tears of rage or joy?
Will they bring rains befriending Man
Or otherwise destroy?

For your answer, search the skies
And please be kind to Him.
Our future lies in how He cries
And, buddy, I can't swim.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
JANNA
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1 posted 06-18-99 10:45 PM       View Profile for JANNA   Email JANNA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JANNA

Oh WOW! Your poems are amazing!! I haven't gotten to read that many of them yet, but it is obvious how truely talented you are. This one in particular spoke greatly to me, I can't wait to read the rest. I hope to be inspired by your work.
Genea
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2 posted 06-19-99 12:05 AM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

Balladeer,

I liked it all till the last line....just did not seem to fit with the rest of it. It's like the mood/tone of the last line doesn't jive with the rest.
Suggestion for last line: "And how we sing life's hymns."

Just a suggestion...the rest is great.
~Genea
ac
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3 posted 06-19-99 11:57 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

A really touching poem...again, something to make us think...and just like you, i worry too, because i as well can't swim...
Wintersurfer
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4 posted 06-19-99 01:55 PM       View Profile for Wintersurfer   Email Wintersurfer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wintersurfer

I love it....all the way to the last drop! I like the mood twist at the end..very human.
Balladeer
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5 posted 06-19-99 04:20 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you all for your nice comments. It's always interesting to note people's different reactions. It's one of the things that makes poetry a wonderful thing.
Nan
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6 posted 06-20-99 08:52 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Ya know, I can't even say that this is a bit of a change for you - every one of your poems shows another side of you -
Raven
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7 posted 06-20-99 02:19 PM       View Profile for Raven   Email Raven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Raven

Yours is a poem I'll never forget, it's beautiful and powerful at the same time, you have a style that cannot be imitated, I'm just honored to be able to read it.
Balladeer
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8 posted 06-20-99 03:48 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Na, Nan. My poems only show one side...the inside.

Raven...I am the one who is honored to have someone like you appreciate my efforts. Thank you........
elvira
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9 posted 07-22-99 03:02 AM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

lovely...and a nice giggle at the end...no one does it better than you

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one night at the airport...Childhood Memories...eight short weeks...your countenance...just watching tv...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J....Feel the need?...serving wench...the mistress...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart
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10 posted 07-22-99 08:57 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Balladeer, I'm glad this came to the forefront again for all to see...and I'm glad you treat Him with some humor, or else we would have to say "The devil made me do it!"

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow

Saxoness
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11 posted 07-22-99 09:07 AM       View Profile for Saxoness   Email Saxoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Saxoness

I'm begining to hunger for your work.......thank you for this, it was wondeful, I love the last line.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 07-22-99 12:11 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Balladeer...you out did yourself with this one. A wonderful piece and one of which you should be proud.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
~one voice~
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13 posted 07-22-99 01:30 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Balladeer, this one is very spiritual...and peaceful too. I love it!

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~onevoice~

"I never kissed somebody so that they would break my heart."

Balladeer
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14 posted 07-22-99 03:53 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

My heartfelt thanks to you all. Thank you.
armanca
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15 posted 07-22-99 04:36 PM       View Profile for armanca   Email armanca   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for armanca

fear not my buddy, who can't swim
it's here i give a helping limb. *Smile*

I loved that part...as i love your work
Lost Dreamer
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16 posted 07-22-99 07:51 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Sir Balladeer, I keep thinking I've seen the best then another one comes along and throws me for a loop. I would say this is your best, but I know inside that self of yours we hav'nt seen anything yet.
 
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