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Out of Giving

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Balladeer
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0 posted 06-18-99 03:34 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer



You said you wanted happiness,
A though that sounded great.
You said you needed peace of mind
I offered you a plate.

You said you wanted me around.
I showed you how to make it.
I gave the opportunity
How come you didn't take it?

You know the things I need to have.
My life's an open door
And, in return I'd give and give,
And then I'd give some more.

But, either I am very dumb
Or you're not very smart.
While I spent my time giving,
You were taking me apart.

You never tried to understand
What I was all about
And now, instead of giving,
I have simply given out.

Frustration makes my muscles ache
But life is for the living.
How sad you finally came to take
When I was out of giving.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Craig
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1 posted 06-18-99 03:53 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

You've done it again, Captured a feeling in ink (or in this case typographical production reproduced in binary format)

Craig (still posting still reading)
Genea
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2 posted 06-18-99 04:32 PM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

Balladeer,
I like it - simple and direct.

~Genea
Nan
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3 posted 06-18-99 04:47 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Hey - Didn't I say that HappiNess was "giving and giving"? or was that love?? 'twas one of them for sure -
Nice one M&M...
sea_of_okc
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4 posted 06-18-99 05:25 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Excellent work as usual, you have captured the give and take of a onesided relationship.
Unfortunately I can relate all too well...
Keep those wonderful poems coming!
jfreak
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5 posted 06-18-99 07:10 PM       View Profile for jfreak   Email jfreak   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jfreak

Hey M&M, Thanx for the other poem you sent me. I sent it to my gal, she liked it a lot. This poem is a great one, you truly have a gift for grabbing the human spirit and putting it down on paper. Totally awesome.

Jfreak
Wintersurfer
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6 posted 06-18-99 07:46 PM       View Profile for Wintersurfer   Email Wintersurfer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wintersurfer

Balladeer~
Are you sure you aren't me in a parallel universe? What a gift--to allow the reader to believe that the words you write fit their own life so perfectly...saying, "That has to be written for me"! Thank you for giving just a little bit more!
Balladeer
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7 posted 06-18-99 08:44 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I thank you all wholeheartedly and especially to you, Nan, for introducing me to this wonderful group.
Fred Hobbs
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8 posted 06-18-99 08:56 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Another fine one Balladeer. You've a great talent.

fh
ac
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9 posted 06-19-99 11:01 AM       View Profile for ac   Email ac   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ac

Wonderfully put...i marvel at how you put into such simple words something that's all too familiar for me ...you definetely inspire me...
Lost Dreamer
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10 posted 08-19-99 10:33 AM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Balladeer, looks like this could have been one of your first Masterpieces here at Passions, so I shall boost it to the front for a second round. Great piece of work, as always.
Poet deVine
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11 posted 08-19-99 10:41 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

How could I have missed this! A day without Balladeer is like a day without sunshine!
wayoutwalt
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12 posted 08-19-99 11:29 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

i liked it also mister balladeer is been a joy to watch the master evolve
Sue
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13 posted 08-19-99 03:52 PM       View Profile for Sue   Email Sue   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sue

Thank you, Lost Dreamer, for bringing this one to the front, otherwise I might never have read it.
Balladeer, that is good, did you know?
WhtDove
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14 posted 08-19-99 04:24 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

So well done my friend, you took the words right out of my mouth! I couldn't of explained it better (even tho I tried).
Sunshine
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15 posted 08-19-99 04:52 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Our Balladeer only speaks words of truth.
Too bad we cannot clone him, forsooth!

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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


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16 posted 08-19-99 04:58 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well done!!!
 
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