ac...I like the idea and the poem has a good cadence to it. I would like it more if the rymes in the last two stanzas were a little closer (space/expect, door/unfold). I am saying that to help, not criticize. Feel free to tell me to mind my own business, if you want.
San Juan, Puerto Rico
No, Balladeer, i appreciate the feedback, especially from you, I've read your work and I'm still in awe. Regardless, you're right, i'm usually really partial to the rhythm of what i write but it just flowed that way and i let it slip that time...