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The Story of Ron Odom

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sea_of_okc
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0 posted 06-17-99 03:40 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for sea_of_okc

Ron Odom had but one eye
It made it hard to see
Every day he went to town
Complaining bitterly
"Woe is me, feel sorry for me
For what I say is true
Give to me another eye
There's nothing I won't do."
To Ron's town one sunny day
There came a holy man
Ten years growth upon his face
And healing in his hands
So did Ron begin to plead
"O your most holy grace,
I would like another eye
So won't you touch my face?"
With a sad and rueful smile
Did the man comply
He put his hands upon Ron's head
And granted him an eye
Then old Ron went dancing home
Elated it was true
Until he looked upon his eyes
One brown, the other blue
Straight back into town he went
And with the man did speak
"Look at what you've done to me!
I look like some damn freak!
Look at my eyes you stupid lout
One brown and one blue
You absolutely must fix it
This just will not do!!"
The man looked up and grinned at Ron
Then he began to laugh
"Such a fool I think you are
But come, I'll make them match."
Now Ron has but two black holes
He's worse off than before
Then again maybe he's not
For he complains no more.

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Steven Seaman
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1 posted 06-17-99 04:12 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

absolutely delightful! The rhyme, the meter, the flow and the story are all top-notch. Well done!
sea_of_okc
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2 posted 06-17-99 04:22 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Coming from you balladeer that is very high praise indeed! Thanks for the encouragement
Craig
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3 posted 06-17-99 04:24 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

Another Classic to be.

Reminds me of the saying 'in the land of the blind the one eyed man is king ' only in reverse

You keep posting them, I'll keep reading them. I bet you get tired before I do.
Fred Hobbs
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4 posted 06-17-99 08:11 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

I love good rhyme and this poem is ripe with it. Nice work.
sea_of_okc
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5 posted 06-18-99 05:20 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Thank you for responding Fred and Craig.
I may be getting old but I'm not tired yet Craig...
Craig
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6 posted 06-18-99 05:24 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

sorry I couldn't reply any quicker to your reply to my reply!!!!!!!

Two old men dreaming and bleeding
their thoughts for your reading
Two aged men cursing and worse
on your screen in twin verse
Two tired men scribbling and dribbling
words that your nibbling
Two archaic men aching and shaking
Rhythmic time taking

To old men dreaming and bleeding
and feeding the seedling
To aged men cursing and worse
wrestle your writers curse
To tired men scribbling and dribbling
without fear or quibbling
To archaic men aching and shaking
two Poets in the making
elvira
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7 posted 07-21-99 10:24 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

well done...an enjoyable read, this story of greed

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If I had my mouth I would bite. If I had my liberty I would do my liking. In the mean time, let me be that I am, and seek not to alter me. ~~~Shakespeare~~~

Ohme
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8 posted 07-21-99 10:38 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Oh, I love the story. I do like to see a not nice character get a kick in the butt instead of the pat on the back he expects to get.
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