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When you were you

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Balladeer
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0 posted 06-16-99 05:47 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

When you were you and I was me,
The world was happy, young and free
And every day brought ecstacy
When you were you and I was me.

When I was me and you were you,
Amid the laughs and ballyhoo,
Dreams had a way of coming true
When I was me and you were you.

But Time has a way of changing things.
The present goes; the future brings
Reminders of pasts that hurt and sting
And 'nothing' where once lived 'everything'.

Now the past is gone and you're not you
Although you say it isn't true,
Small facts of life keep showing through
That tell me that you're still not you.

A smile that comes a second late,
And food left over on your plate;
The way you faintly hesitate
Before saying, "Everthing is great!"

No, you're not you and - nor am I
This lonely look...a listless sigh
The tear still there behind my eye
Although I laugh instead of cry.

I am now what I used to be
Before I had the chance to see
What's hidden deep inside of me -
The happy man you let me be.

And you - you'll have a happy life
You'll make some lucky man a wife,
And, when pain cuts you like a knife,
You'll pass it off as 'marital strife'.

But, if pain finally gets you down,
Then get back up and look around
And listen to the lonely sound
Of MILLIONS who have never found...

That happiness is there to see,
And be glad we had the chance to be
In love, and loving, tenderly
When you were you and I was me.

© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Nimrod the Hunter
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1 posted 06-16-99 06:13 PM       View Profile for Nimrod the Hunter   Email Nimrod the Hunter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nimrod the Hunter

I can't even begin to grasp how you got as good at writing as you are. Everything you've written, EVERYTHING, is really good, and I think this is among the best of them even though it is hard to tell. The happiest people I know have told me that time hardly exists for them. While I constantly might look at my watch, they never look at it unless for a doctor's appointment or something. I don't understand it. "When you were you and I was me"..... which I interpret as when life was once sweet and innocent.

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Nimrod the Hunter
Balladeer
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2 posted 06-16-99 06:23 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Interpretation correct, great Nimrod. Thanks for the kind words.
Genea
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3 posted 06-16-99 06:34 PM       View Profile for Genea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Genea

Balladeer,

This is a wonderful piece....i read different levels of meaning in it. I have read it over several times and pull something different and new from it each time. That is a sign of a great work for me.

Thanks!
~Genea
Craig
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4 posted 06-16-99 08:43 PM       View Profile for Craig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Craig

Absolutely, positively the best……………………………..
Sorry lost for words AGAIN

Craig
Poet deVine
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5 posted 06-16-99 08:58 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Frankly, I'm glad you are you...because you produce such wonderful works of art. Your mastery of the written word amazes me!


Wolfgang
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6 posted 06-16-99 09:25 PM       View Profile for Wolfgang   Email Wolfgang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wolfgang's Home Page   View IP for Wolfgang

A poet with a pocket full of experience and living.
You'll never hit your peak, Balladeer,
you just keep getting better

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Wolfgang
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7 posted 06-17-99 02:58 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

That's the nicest definition of "old man" I've ever seen!!! (kidding) Thanks, Wolf!
Augchic711
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8 posted 06-17-99 03:20 PM       View Profile for Augchic711   Email Augchic711   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Augchic711

You are so entirely talented! I would like to say that you inspire me to write and love and enjoy life! I appreciate you sharing your excellent writing ability with me and other online writers! Thank you from the bottom of my heart!!!
sea_of_okc
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9 posted 06-17-99 04:30 PM       View Profile for sea_of_okc   Email sea_of_okc   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sea_of_okc

Speechless... feel like you wrote this about me and a woman I once loved...
Fred Hobbs
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10 posted 06-17-99 07:49 PM       View Profile for Fred Hobbs   Email Fred Hobbs   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Fred Hobbs's Home Page   View IP for Fred Hobbs

Balladeer,
And this is one that I would very much like to have written. What all here have said is true. You are VERY talented.

sandman
Gilian
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11 posted 06-19-99 08:49 PM       View Profile for Gilian   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gilian

I enjoyed this one. I hope you don't mind but I did a spin-off reply. It is under "If I were you"
Sunshine
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12 posted 08-13-99 02:10 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

For to find the old you, and the old me
we'd have to take our own hesitant chance
of going through that closed door
to find if we could still together dance.

Will you come? Will you be?
Together again, and one with me?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Thanks, Balladeer, for all of the food for thought.


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Sunshine
Words will always express our feelings true. ~~~ KRJ
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 08-13-99 02:23 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I got so lost in reading all the rave reviews, I forgot what the poem was about ! So I read it over again, and loved it even more the 2nd time around...You do have a romantic side to you...??

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- poet FemmeFatale

"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 08-13-99 05:42 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

To Balladeer, some times your poems are like a piece of candy and since I'm a candyholic
I always over dose. It is an honor to know you and hope you will always be my friend.
Balladeer
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15 posted 08-13-99 05:54 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Yes, Sunshine.

Femme....I sure do..sometime too much so.

Sy, that's something you can always count on!
Poet deVine
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16 posted 08-13-99 06:01 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Balladeer, I heard you referred to as Romeo on another reply to one of your poems! That's pretty romantic!
~one voice~
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17 posted 08-13-99 06:09 PM       View Profile for ~one voice~   Email ~one voice~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~one voice~

Balladeer, I don't know to say that has already been said, but this is a fantastic piece of work! Like someone said up there, you just keep getting better and better! I love your work!

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~onevoice~

"She looked at her life
like lines, never-ending,
constantly forming,
reforming and bending."


RainbowGirl
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18 posted 08-13-99 08:26 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Kudos....Sensitivity is love and love is sensitivity....to each other!

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


WhtDove
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19 posted 08-13-99 08:55 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Well, I don't know what I could add here that hasn't been said already.
Your work is truly inspiring. Wish I had your talent.
Lost Dreamer
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20 posted 08-13-99 09:13 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Sir Balladeer, You must have a giant overflowing soul, for you get so much out of every experience you encounter, and to describe it all with such intreging detail, you are just a marvel.
Balladeer
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21 posted 08-13-99 10:09 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

I truly appreciate your comments very much. Thank you.
redwriter1
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22 posted 08-13-99 11:23 PM       View Profile for redwriter1   Email redwriter1   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redwriter1

A lonely lament to be sure.

but.. was it the "real" you and the "real" her....??

if not.. well.. that's what happens.

Poetry is great.. but intimacy and honesty are truly the hard things to find.. and capture..

and usually.. they are very plain things.. not the things poetry is made of..except in the mind of the poet...

I wrote the poem about lilacs describing how love "feels". and smells.. but remember.. those lilac bushes.. have very deep roots nurtured by long. and lonely and boring.. times.. when there is no bloom, no flower.. no nothing.. except the promise.. of spring..

I have no idea what I just said.. but it makes sense to me..

but.. the promise.. is ooohhh so sweet...



[This message has been edited by redwriter1 (edited 08-14-99).]
moonmoon
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23 posted 08-13-99 11:27 PM       View Profile for moonmoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for moonmoon

Balladeer,
This was such an awesome poem...
I am new to this board (wonder where I had been so long...)

You have an incredible place here !! I am still frantically trying to drink from the brimming chalice of this poetic abundance...

Thanks soo much for this beautiful place..Looking forward to more of your poems & encouragement...
Luna
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24 posted 08-13-99 11:28 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Some things are not for publication, Red. A man's gotta have a FEW secrets!
 
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