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Small Pain in my Chest

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Balladeer
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( repost from other site )


The soldier boy was sitting calmly underneath that tree.
As I approached it, I could see him beckoning to me.
The battle had been long and hard and lasted through the night
And scores of figures on the ground lay still by morning's light.

"I wonder if you'd help me, sir", he smiled as best he could.
"A sip of water on this morn would surely do me good.
We fought all day and fought all night with scarcely any rest -
A sip of water for I have a small pain in my chest."

As I looked at him, I could see the large stain on his shirt
All reddish-brown from his warm blood mixed in with Asian dirt.
"Not much", said he. "I count myself more lucky than the rest.
They're all gone while I just have a small pain in my chest."

"Must be fatigue", he weakIy smiled. "I must be getting old.
I see the sun is shining bright and yet I'm feeling cold.
We climbed the hill, two hundred strong, but as we cleared the crest,
The night exploded and I felt this small pain in my chest."

"I looked around to get some aid - the only things I found
Were big, deep craters in the earth - bodies on the ground.
I kept an firing at them, sir. I tried to do my best,
But finally sat down with this small pain in my chest."

"I'm grateful, sir", he whispered, as I handed my canteen
And smiled a smile that was, I think, the brightest that I've seen.
"Seems silly that a man my size so full of vim and zest,
Could find himself defeated by a small pain in his chest."

"What would my wife be thinking of her man so strong and grown,
If she could see me sitting here, too weak to stand alone?
Could my mother have imagined, as she held me to her breast,
That I'd be sitting HERE one day with this pain in my chest?"

"Can it be getting dark so soon?" He winced up at the sun.
"It's growing dim and I thought that the day had just begun.
I think, before I travel on, I'll get a little rest ..........
And, quietly, the boy died from that small pain in his chest.

I don't recall what happened then. I think I must have cried;
I put my arms around him and I pulled him to my side
And, as I held him to me, I could feel our wounds were pressed
The large one in my heart against the small one in his chest.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Leigh Anne
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1 posted 06-15-99 08:48 PM       View Profile for Leigh Anne   Email Leigh Anne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Leigh Anne's Home Page   View IP for Leigh Anne

Your poem was so vivid and beautiful. Though heart wrenching at times. You posess such talent, & i can't wait to read more of your work!
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2 posted 06-15-99 09:05 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Your kind words are greatly appreciated, Leigh Ann. Thank you.
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I have yet to read a contemporary poet whose words have the power to envoke the emotions yours "conger up" in me.
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4 posted 06-15-99 09:14 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thanks. I accept your conger-adulations with pride!
Wolfgang
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5 posted 06-15-99 09:22 PM       View Profile for Wolfgang   Email Wolfgang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wolfgang's Home Page   View IP for Wolfgang

A truly touching and heartfelt poem. A great tribute to all soldiers.
What tears you must have shed writing this emotional work.
Thank you


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and thank you, Wolfgang, for your insight...
Krystal
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Every time I read something that you wrote, I am moved beyond words! Judging from all the responses you accumulate, you already know you are talented... but I'll tell you anyway. Your poetry is among the best I've ever read... if not THE best I've ever read!!

This poem, especially, was a tear-jerker. I am so impressed! (I especially liked the last two lines... wonderful!)

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8 posted 06-21-99 10:50 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Krystal,

Words liek yours make it easy for me to keep going. I value your appreciation very much. Thank you.
Marie
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Absolutely touching. Is it O.K. if I let my boss look at it (he is a friend of a publisher) I know him VERY well, and he (my boss) would really like this one. My boss says anything he likes, his friend the publisher likes it. (usually)
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You touch me

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Marie.....please, with my blessing and thank you for caring.

and you, Christelle.....
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Balladeer,

Such emotion, such courage, such ....goodness! Powerful comes to mind. Anything else i say, pales in comparison to this wonderful poem.

Loved it!
~Genea
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My Deer Balladeer.....
I never told you how much I like this poem!!!
Silly me....
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Once again you move me with your talent. It seems you can reach any plane with such percision
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15 posted 07-16-99 11:25 PM       View Profile for elvira   Email elvira   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for elvira

such goosebumps...simply delightful...thank you Michael

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Childhood Memories...your countenance...hoarse whispers...My One and Only...Tribute to M.J... serving wench...stolen hours...devotion...Master...apart...


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You da man! Lets go play a round of golf sometime!
PW

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What can I say but that I cried... yes, really... the futility of lost lives in war... oh, that was truly beautiful, Balladeer
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wow... a three lettered word that explains in every detail my amazement at your talent. You truly have a gift for wordsmithing. Thank you for sharing. I believe this poem shows the futility of war and the fact that even in adversity and when facing death, that not even war can break the human spirit.
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Dear Sir, how much time do you invest in writing something such as this ? I rarely comment on your work because you receive such rave reviews, but I love them just the same!! If only I had more time on my hands, and more patience with myself...but I could only hope to be a fraction of what you are!!! Fabulous...

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"The strongest man in the world is he who stands most alone..." Henrik Ibsen (1826-1906) Norwegian dramatist lyric poet

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Fellow poets, if my poem moved you to tears, then we're even because your comments have done the same for me. Thank you all.


Poetwheel, any time. Bring money.
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Balladeer....I have been away from the poetry side of this for a few days and nearly missed this wonderful poem. What a loss it would have been for me. As I sit here with tears in my eyes I can't help but think of what a master story teller you are. This was exquisetly written and a piece for which you should be very proud. Now get it out there somewhere besides here!!! If you need ideas where, I have a few for you.

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"Nobody has measured, not even poets, how much the heart can hold" ~Zelda Fitzgerald
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Everything that has been said I would say to you again. You are a master of words! Your colletive work is like a kaleidoscope of the human heart. Thank you for sharing all that you do.
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I'm sitting here trying to type through tears. Your mastery of words is just breathtaking, and inspiring. Particularly this poem. I grew up in the military, and married into it as well, and all too often I look around to see the impartial, unhuman side of things -- not to mention live with fear for what might happen to my husband should he be sent off onto a battlefield. It may sound odd, to say thank you, for this piece, but... Thank You.
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24 posted 07-27-99 11:32 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

My thanks to you, Jessica. Let's pray it never happens.

Andrew, Hoot...thank you both.
 
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