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sig
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since 06-12-99
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0 posted 06-13-99 12:55 PM       View Profile for sig   Email sig   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sig


I read a story, I dreamed a dream,
My present consciousness is not keen.
What others think I take great care,
To ponder about their life's despair.
Who am I to think on my own
Against the religious dogmatic tone.
Can I believe the stories I read
Or the dreams that I breed?
Is sin for me sin for all
Brotherhoods departed fall.
Joined in life here and now
Condemned to die; death so foul.
I read a story, I dreamed a dream
I'm torn in two, seam from seam.
Pulled one way, lead another
My decision; someone's blunder.
I've lost my compuss, can't hear my call...Where in life's lot do I fall?
Humanity joined togeather as one,
How can I know the incarnate Son?

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Red Letter
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since 05-24-99
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1 posted 06-13-99 05:46 PM       View Profile for Red Letter   Email Red Letter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red Letter

This has such an excellent message and I really enjoyed the way you presented it... I have faced the same questions many times myself.

My only suggestion would be to run your stuff through spell-check (mispellings or typos are often oversights but tend to be distracting to the reader). BTW, it should be "Veil" not "Vail", unless you are talking about the Colorado city...

Otherwise, a powerful read!
teenpoet
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2 posted 05-06-2003 10:34 AM       View Profile for teenpoet   Email teenpoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for teenpoet

Very nice, and it's good.  You spelled compass wrong.  And I don't neccessarily understand the title but it's good.

~Keep dreaming~
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