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Making Love to You

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Balladeer
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I enjoyed making love to you last night.

I enjoyed holding you close to me and feeling
The softness of your skin blend with mine
As it had so many times before.

Your hair was different than I recall -
A bit blonder, perhaps
And a contented lifestyle may have added
A pound or two
Here and there
I don't care.

Surely you could sense how I'd missed you
By how I kissed you
And touched you
And clung to you.

I knew it was you

Even though you looked at me strangely
As I whispered your name
I wasn't fooled.

I knew it was you because
It was your name on my lips
And your voice in my ear
And your thoughts in my heart.

I don't know why you looked at me so strangely
In the early morning light
Or why you left so quickly
Without turning without speaking

But I know you'll come back. You always do.

Your hair may be a different color
Perhaps you'll change perfume.
Perhaps I may not notice
As you walk into the room.

But as I lay beside you,
One fact will still hold true
That, every time that I make love,
I'll be making love to you.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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Those are teardrops on my cheek! This was so sad!
Ron
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Now that was subtle. And very, very beautiful.

Ron
Red Letter
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3 posted 06-12-99 06:53 PM       View Profile for Red Letter   Email Red Letter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red Letter

this has a very romantic message but I am curious as to whether it was meant to be freeverse or rhyme? I found the switching back and forth a bit distracting...

Just a thought,
Red
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4 posted 06-12-99 07:12 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Good question, Red. Actually, there is no switching back and forth. The first part, dealing with the past is basically free verse and the last part, dealing with the future, is in rhyme. I did this intentionally. If I did a good job, the reader would be able to make the transition smoothly, almost unnoticeably.
If I didn't, it would be distracting. Oh, well, ya can't win 'em all.
ashlerr
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5 posted 06-13-99 07:01 AM       View Profile for ashlerr   Email ashlerr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ashlerr

maybe not them all but in this one with me you have. i have not much else to say but...great.
Nan
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Balladeer, this truly is excellent - I have to agree with the consensus here....
I bet this one is really exceptional when it's recited........

Red Letter
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7 posted 06-13-99 05:40 PM       View Profile for Red Letter   Email Red Letter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red Letter

"Here and there/I don't care"? Doesn't that rhyme?

ok, ok, so I'm being a pain in the ass... just trying to make a point

hehehe
you know I still luv ya, Sweet!!!
Raven
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8 posted 06-23-99 01:32 PM       View Profile for Raven   Email Raven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Raven

That poem was so beautiful, I loved it!

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"They sing the stories of the present, of people trapped in a shadow world" ~Charlotte Seley~
Krystal
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9 posted 06-23-99 04:53 PM       View Profile for Krystal   Email Krystal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krystal

Beautiful....

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Shannon D. Montgomery
("Krystal")
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10 posted 07-07-99 01:42 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

We all live in our memories at one time or another...or at least this is how it struck me. Quite charming...for old folks.

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Sunshine

Words will always express our feelings true.
KRJ

hoot_owl_rn
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An absolutely amazing piece of work.........I sat spellbound in the trance you created with this poem. It gripped the reader from the beginning and took them on a wonderful, maddening joyride to the very end. The flow as smoothe as honey and just as tastey. A very sad tale of not being able to let go. You outdid yourself!!!

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 07-08-99).]
Cinderella
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12 posted 07-07-99 07:08 PM       View Profile for Cinderella   Email Cinderella   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cinderella

What passion you show as I clung to every word! Marvelous as always.
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My warmest thanks to all of you. Hoot_owl, thank you very much!
Poetwheel
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14 posted 07-07-99 08:48 PM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Great poem, though like most of the others, I didn't find it sad at all... Baladeer was it your intention for this one to leave the reader thinking the lovers scenario was a sad one? To me it is the comfortable feelings between two lovers who have grown together so well that they no longer pay attention to small changes; they are more concerned with the larger meaning of love and the comfort of being together. I'd probably get a whack if i read it to my wife though! Excellent capture here!
PW

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Afraid you blew a tire on this one, Poetwheel. It's about a man so enraptured with a past lover that, even though the affair is over, she is the only one in his mind, no matter who he is with and, in his delusional fantasy, he is always with her. You took the time to read it, study it and question it. That makes you aces with me! Thanks for your comment.

......and thank all of you very much.
IsabelleSkye
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16 posted 07-07-99 11:13 PM       View Profile for IsabelleSkye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for IsabelleSkye

I wonder, my friend, if there isn't a "secret" part in our hearts that we hold for someone special. I have one and I can relate to this poem totally. The mind is a great tool, with it we can delude ourselves, we can imagine anything. Is it a bit odd to be able to still feel someone's skin even after months of being apart? *SIGH* Well it looks like no answers could be given for a delusion like this. All in all I loved this, and I'll just ramble my way outta the door! Much Luv
IZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZY
tulip
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17 posted 07-08-99 01:27 AM       View Profile for tulip   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for tulip

Excellent!
doreen peri
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18 posted 07-08-99 01:51 AM       View Profile for doreen peri   Email doreen peri   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for doreen peri

Glad you remembered. I'd forgotten about it until you reminded me.
-dp
Delilah
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19 posted 07-08-99 01:56 AM       View Profile for Delilah   Email Delilah   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Delilah

Beautiful...unique.

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Delilah
:)
DreamEvil
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20 posted 07-08-99 03:03 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Occasionally a piece of poetry, not lost in Darkness, grabs me. This was one.

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I am not responsible for how you choose to interpret what I say.


Poetwheel
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21 posted 07-08-99 10:45 AM       View Profile for Poetwheel   Email Poetwheel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Poetwheel's Home Page   View IP for Poetwheel

Ahhh! After a reread I caught the message. It was completely lost on me the first time around - this is not due to your style, its simply becase I didn't read it with an open mind... Excellent! Even better after the 2nd read. Thanks for the signal flare.
PW

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...and my undying thanks to all of you.
Leigh Anne
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Dearest Balladeer,
Your continued words of beauty and truth have a way of inspiring me, at my most uninspirable times! Keep it up!
blueloon
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need i say more than "thank you." your words are enchanting.

blueloon
 
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