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BMuller
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0 posted 02-25-2005 10:43 PM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for BMuller


Taking some time out of your week
To write me a poem was just so sweet
I know you say you think it is lame
But I think it is dear and darling just the same
It makes me so happy to finally get your attention on me
For I have been trying to earn it everlastingly
Even though at times I have taken your words to heart
You have to understand why I was so dark
I look up to you more than you could know
And so what you say can deal a hefty blow
I admire you not simply for being a good person free of strife
But because it is who you are naturally in life
If it came to me as easily as it does to you
I would have accomplished so much of what I set out to do
Also know that I realize my cynicism has upset you some
And that I am trying to ameliorate my idiom
So now as I wind this poem to an end
Just remember that I am trying to be a friend
Love Ben
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1 posted 02-28-2005 03:07 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

I think it's good like it is

from the heart
Midnitesun
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2 posted 02-28-2005 09:19 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun


Maybe you would like to join Pips and continue writing? I enjoyed this. It's a wonderful way to acknowledge and thank someone.
Kerri Souza
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3 posted 03-07-2005 07:05 PM       View Profile for Kerri Souza   Email Kerri Souza   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kerri Souza

I think this poem is great just the way you have it. Don't change a thing.

Kerri

 
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