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ThUnDeRkYsS
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since 1999-09-23
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Wisconsin

0 posted 1999-09-29 03:24 AM


When does it end
this pain so great
where is a friend
whos hand to take

Things meant to be
actions take course
just want to be free
not filled with remorse

Times of the past
forever seem real
how long will it last
this black that I feel

Please take it away
erase from my heart
please show me the way
please Lord, press restart

I cry and I shake
as they rise to the top
these smiles I fake
dear heart, please soon stop.

You once stole my breath
I felt like a child
I now ache for death
my request has been filed

© Copyright 1999 B.J.Howe - All Rights Reserved
Dragoness
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since 1999-08-07
Posts 513

1 posted 1999-09-29 03:48 AM


Wow! Very moving!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

Vicki
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2 posted 1999-09-29 04:03 AM


That was great
Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 1999-09-29 09:34 AM


Clever enjoyed the read.
Marilyn
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4 posted 1999-09-29 11:07 AM


Great work. Could feel every word.
suthern
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Member Seraphic
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5 posted 1999-09-29 12:02 PM


"press restart"... how often I've wished we could! *S* Great poem!
Michael
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6 posted 1999-09-29 12:15 PM


Wonderul piece here, you convey your emotion very well. Ditto suthern - oh, to be able to press the "restart" button.

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Michael Anderson

May Darkness find you all through the day.



ThUnDeRkYsS
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since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
7 posted 1999-09-29 09:16 PM


Thank you all for your replies... They are greatly appreciated This is how I feel sometimes, over guess what ??? lol The evil, darkness of lost... well, you know
Denise
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8 posted 1999-09-29 09:19 PM


Wonderful!

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Denise

passing shadows
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9 posted 2003-01-04 04:44 AM


sad...I know the feeling
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