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Tara Simms
Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA

0 posted 1999-09-29 01:30 AM



Eternal Kiss

I want to make love to you…
show you what words cannot express.
Reveal my vulnerable side,
emotions no longer reigned in.

I want to own you,
the way you own me.
I need to possess you
body, mind and soul.
Let’s take this connection
to the next level,
Beyond the physical
to the spiritual.

Our skin gets in the way,
Preventing me from getting
As close as I need.
I want to feel our souls
touching
connecting
merging
into one.

Make love to me,
Slow, sweet love.
Let every touch, every sound
Be an expression of our devotion,
Pure in motive.

Look at me,
See me!
My essence is ready
for your discovery.

I can see myself in your eyes,
They tell me I am beautiful,
adored.
The light in your eyes
brings tears to mine.

If I close my eyes
I can feel your caress,
even though you have
yet to touch me.

An out of body experience,
I watch our
souls
as they
embrace
in eternal kiss.
******


This is in response to a challenge on making love.




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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/



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DreamEvil
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396

1 posted 1999-09-29 01:34 AM


You have done well with this challenge, Tara. The depiction is breathtaking.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©


Systematic Decay
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........
2 posted 1999-09-29 01:43 AM


Wow, great poem, I definitely have the opinion that making love is much different than simply having sex, and you have captured the esscence of it here. Not that I'm all that knowlegeable in this area.

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"Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage."
-Billy Corgan-

Julie Jordan Scott
Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146
Bakersfield, CA USA
3 posted 1999-09-29 01:45 AM


Tara, in your words I can feel your feelings, understand your longing, acknowledge the deeep longing and desires you feel.

Sensual, torrid, yet a little uneasy as well.....lets see where this is going....shall we?

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Julie Jordan Scott is a Freelance Writer and Public Speaker,
but her favorite role is that of Mommy! Visit her website at
http://www.5passions.com

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

4 posted 1999-09-29 02:09 AM


Wonderful! Especially the bit about getting rid of skin. Well done, Tara.
Dragoness
Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513

5 posted 1999-09-29 02:25 AM


Beautiful expression of making love!

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.

rascalx
Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590
Florence, SC, USA
6 posted 1999-09-29 02:50 AM


a beautiful and vivid description of longing and desire for that perfect sexual mate. I know those feelings all too well. Thanks for giving them a voice.
Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

7 posted 1999-09-29 09:13 AM


Tara, a wonderful poem well done, especially loved ......Our skin gets in the way,
Preventing me from getting
As close as I need.
I want to feel our souls
touching
connecting
merging
into one.



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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
8 posted 1999-09-29 09:39 AM


Tara,
You have touched me without touching me.
Well done.

Iloveit
Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM
9 posted 1999-09-29 09:44 AM


often I have marveled at the power of a kiss, between two lovers, and you have captured it beautifully, great job! I love the way you open yourself totally and find acceptance and love....sigh

[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 09-29-1999).]

Pepper
Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079
Southern Florida
10 posted 1999-09-29 10:00 AM


gorgeous Tara....sigh

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
11 posted 1999-09-29 10:07 AM


Tara....a beautiful expression
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
12 posted 1999-09-29 12:04 PM


Exquisite and sweet, Tara,
Wonderfully done.

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Michael Anderson

May Darkness find you all through the day.



Tara Simms
Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244
Honea Path, SC USA
13 posted 1999-09-29 10:21 PM


Thanks guys. I love how a great conversation with a friend can inspire me!

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It matters not how strait the gate;
How charged with punishments the scroll;
I am the master of my fate:
I am the captain of my soul.
--W.E. Henley
Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/



Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
14 posted 1999-09-29 10:25 PM


OMG! Tara, you've created a lovely definition and explanation of a kiss that is eternally true and divine...

caroline
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since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218
http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm
15 posted 1999-09-29 11:10 PM


Perfection, Tara.

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Justbleu
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
16 posted 1999-09-30 12:13 PM


Making love is so very special and you portrayed that beautifully here!! Well Done!!

Bridgette

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"It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart"



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