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The Final Straw (a pantoum)

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Elizabeth
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0 posted 09-28-1999 11:33 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

The day that you did give yourself to me
I thought forever I'd have you to hold.
But now the truth I finally can see.
You're nothing more than callous, cruel, and cold.

I thought forever I'd have you to hold
And when you strayed, you got another chance.
You're nothing more that callous, cruel, and cold.
You've gone too far for me to change my stance.

And when you strayed, you got another chance.
I took you back and thought that you would change.
You're gone too far for me to change my stance.
Since change you won't, my life I'll rearrange.

I took you back and thought that you would change.
Then off you went behind my back again.
Since change you won't, my life I'll rearrange.
The meaning of true love's beyond your ken.

Then off you went behind my back again.
No longer will we live as man and wife.
The meaning of true love's beyond your ken.
I loved you and yet you caused me this strife.

No longer will we live as man and wife
For now the truth I finally can see.
I loved you and yet you caused me this strife
The day that you did give yourself to me.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."



[This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 09-28-1999).]
© Copyright 1999 Elizabeth - All Rights Reserved
Artur Hawkwing
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1 posted 09-28-1999 11:46 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

It is wonderful to see this poem, a pantoum.... it took a talent to do this, as well as you have.

(psst..) Ok- I admit it, I was getting a bit stressed out without another friend here to share the stress of trying to keep up with their standards.....
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2 posted 09-28-1999 11:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

WELCOME BACK, ELIZABETH!!!! Wonderful poem!


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Denise
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3 posted 09-29-1999 10:43 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Lizzy,
You did a wonderful job. You are a talented writer. I always watch for you poems.
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Very good job on this one...I have yet to master that form...laughs or any other form on here for that matter
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5 posted 09-29-1999 10:09 PM       View Profile for Mystic Essence   Email Mystic Essence   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mystic Essence

Wow, exellent work, Elizabeth!!

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My tears are but a glimpse into the fiery tempest of my soul.~ Althea Willow, 1999~
Elizabeth
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6 posted 09-29-1999 11:09 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

Thank you all, it is nice to be back.

Artur-I know the feeling! And thanks.

Denise, Seymour, Hoot-glad you liked it. I watch out for your poems too.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."

"Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..."

 
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