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The Final Straw (a pantoum)
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The Final Straw (a pantoum) |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
The day that you did give yourself to me I thought forever I'd have you to hold. But now the truth I finally can see. You're nothing more than callous, cruel, and cold. I thought forever I'd have you to hold And when you strayed, you got another chance. You're nothing more that callous, cruel, and cold. You've gone too far for me to change my stance. And when you strayed, you got another chance. I took you back and thought that you would change. You're gone too far for me to change my stance. Since change you won't, my life I'll rearrange. I took you back and thought that you would change. Then off you went behind my back again. Since change you won't, my life I'll rearrange. The meaning of true love's beyond your ken. Then off you went behind my back again. No longer will we live as man and wife. The meaning of true love's beyond your ken. I loved you and yet you caused me this strife. No longer will we live as man and wife For now the truth I finally can see. I loved you and yet you caused me this strife The day that you did give yourself to me. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." "Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..." [This message has been edited by Elizabeth (edited 09-28-1999).] |
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Artur Hawkwing Member
since 1999-06-30
Posts 444USA |
It is wonderful to see this poem, a pantoum.... it took a talent to do this, as well as you have. (psst..) Ok- I admit it, I was getting a bit stressed out without another friend here to share the stress of trying to keep up with their standards.....  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WELCOME BACK, ELIZABETH!!!! Wonderful poem! ------------------ Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lizzy, You did a wonderful job. You are a talented writer. I always watch for you poems. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very good job on this one...I have yet to master that form...laughs or any other form on here for that matter |
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Mystic Essence Junior Member
since 1999-09-29
Posts 28 |
Wow, exellent work, Elizabeth!! ------------------ My tears are but a glimpse into the fiery tempest of my soul.~© Althea Willow, 1999~ |
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Elizabeth
Moderator
Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Thank you all, it is nice to be back. Artur-I know the feeling! And thanks. Denise, Seymour, Hoot-glad you liked it. I watch out for your poems too. ------------------ *Elizabeth* "Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low, But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..." "Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near..." |
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