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Forces (Sestina Challenge) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Ok, you can all blame ms deVine for this one! I make no apologies!  Forces Through the persistent hand of time, we are carried along by fate. Ever are we bound by chaos, and shackled just so to order. Yet both are linked unto nature, the finality being death. Yet who can stay the touch of death? Who can halt the ticking of time? Can oppose the call of nature? Bypass the fickle plan of fate? For without the law of order, all degenerates to chaos. So what is to fear from chaos, when the entropy of each death, contributes to laws of order, and release the strictures of time, rendering meaningless to fate, that which belongs first to nature? All, is the domain of nature, even the burden of chaos. And by plucking the strings of fate, each path leads to the gates of death. Such will be ‘til the end of time, proscribed by the bane of order. Nothing is immune to order, except that which is in nature, or can be traveling in time, and is not seduced by chaos. Or the sweet siren song of death, or haunted by the pull of fate. For that is the end-game of fate, to place all back into order, propelling each and every death, back into the arms of nature, to feed the hunger of chaos, choking it with spadefuls of time. Sheltered in the womb of nature, safe from the anger of chaos, we can release the hand of time. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Awesome job my friend! You did well. Fun are they not? Challenge well met. ------------------ Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent....now please e-mail me and explain this format....PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
There should be no apologies here by anyone, Chris. This is an awe rendering piece. I stand in adoration. Challenge well met, indeed. ------------------ Michael Anderson Loneliness isn't in being alone; Loneliness is alone in being. |
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Dragoness Senior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 513 |
Well done!! Great reading. ------------------ Set you heart free and your mind will follow. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Great poem Christopher..... I can honestly say I think sestinas must have been created by a large headache reliever company....I tried for 2 hours to write something decent...UGH. I can't beleive anyone could even finish a BAD sestina and still have sanity, let alone a good one. So congratulations. ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
lol@SD.....that is pretty much my feelings on structured poems too, but the ones that have been posted so far are awesome, this is great Chris! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Christopher I think you met the challenge really well. You did a great job this! Take a few asprin. lol Twas' a tough job but you rose to the occasion! ------------------ Cleaning your house while your kids are at home is like trying to shovel the driveway during a snowstorm. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Dream- yes indeed it was fun, and quite a challenge! Thank you for the praise, coming from one so well versed in the form means a lot. Ruth-will do, on it's waaaaaaaayyyyyy.... Michael- again friend, very high praise indeed! Thank you dark sir. Dragoness-thank you for reading, and commenting to boost my already too large ego! Amy- thank you very much, but pray tell... whoever in the world told you I was sane??? iloveit- thank you, as SD said, even a bad one is hard enough to do! I'm really glad you thought it was good! dove- thank you ever so much, but I fear it will take more than a couple of asprin! LOL Thank you everybody, I was sure this would be on the bottom by now! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Christopher: I'm not familiar with the format, so I wouldn't presume to tell you whether that aim was achieved or not. *S* But I can tell you this is an excellent read... and greatly enjoyed! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Great Job Christ, between your challenges and talent, you put me to shame. ------------------ A hero is a man who does what he can. ~Isis~ (The Fragile Rose) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Christopher, You met the challenge and you did well. You deserve all the praise you can get. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I am in the same boat as hoot and suthrn. I am not familiar with this form. Any tutorial would be appreciated. I just write...lol. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I love this Christopher!!! Well done! I personally think we should find out who created this form and slap him/her! (It's probably a dead poet - someone beat us to it! )  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well well! Very impressive, I must say. Very dense imagery, well worded. A success!!!! A sestina. This is foreign to me but by the responses above I'm assuming they're hard and horrible... congrats. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And still not sunk to the floor of the poetic ocean, amazing! You are all too wonderful for me! suthern-presume away lass, for that is what I did here! LOL Isis- ummm, I hope the "T" added to the end of my familiar name was a typo. If not, then my ego will really be bursting! LOL, thank you and there is no shame, you are a wonderful poet! sey- thank you sir, and I take all the praise I can get! LOL marilyn- and if you can find that tutor, let me know, I could use the help to! ms deVine- AMEN! (but its probably a good thing he/she's dead...who knows what else they would have come up with!!!) my star- I miss you! The challenge helps to curb the pang of loniliness I feel when I can't hear your voice! Thank you K! [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 09-29-1999).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm totally in awe |
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