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Forces (Sestina Challenge)

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Christopher
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0 posted 09-28-1999 07:23 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Christopher

Ok, you can all blame ms deVine for this one! I make no apologies!


Forces

Through the persistent hand of time,
we are carried along by fate.
Ever are we bound by chaos,
and shackled just so to order.
Yet both are linked unto nature,
the finality being death.

Yet who can stay the touch of death?
Who can halt the ticking of time?
Can oppose the call of nature?
Bypass the fickle plan of fate?
For without the law of order,
all degenerates to chaos.

So what is to fear from chaos,
when the entropy of each death,
contributes to laws of order,
and release the strictures of time,
rendering meaningless to fate,
that which belongs first to nature?

All, is the domain of nature,
even the burden of chaos.
And by plucking the strings of fate,
each path leads to the gates of death.
Such will be ‘til the end of time,
proscribed by the bane of order.

Nothing is immune to order,
except that which is in nature,
or can be traveling in time,
and is not seduced by chaos.
Or the sweet siren song of death,
or haunted by the pull of fate.

For that is the end-game of fate,
to place all back into order,
propelling each and every death,
back into the arms of nature,
to feed the hunger of chaos,
choking it with spadefuls of time.

Sheltered in the womb of nature,
safe from the anger of chaos,
we can release the hand of time.
© Copyright 1999 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
DreamEvil
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1 posted 09-28-1999 07:26 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Awesome job my friend! You did well. Fun are they not? Challenge well met.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
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hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 09-28-1999 09:40 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Excellent....now please e-mail me and explain this format....PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE
Michael
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3 posted 09-28-1999 09:45 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

There should be no apologies here by anyone, Chris. This is an awe rendering piece. I stand in adoration. Challenge well met, indeed.

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Michael Anderson


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Loneliness is alone in being.

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4 posted 09-28-1999 09:52 AM       View Profile for Dragoness   Email Dragoness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Dragoness's Home Page   View IP for Dragoness

Well done!! Great reading.

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Set you heart free and your mind will follow.
Systematic Decay
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5 posted 09-28-1999 01:01 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Great poem Christopher.....

I can honestly say I think sestinas must have been created by a large headache reliever company....I tried for 2 hours to write something decent...UGH. I can't beleive anyone could even finish a BAD sestina and still have sanity, let alone a good one. So congratulations.

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6 posted 09-28-1999 01:49 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

lol@SD.....that is pretty much my feelings on structured poems too, but the ones that have been posted so far are awesome, this is great Chris!
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7 posted 09-28-1999 02:20 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Christopher I think you met the challenge really well. You did a great job this! Take a few asprin. lol Twas' a tough job but you rose to the occasion!

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Christopher
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8 posted 09-28-1999 03:29 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Dream- yes indeed it was fun, and quite a challenge! Thank you for the praise, coming from one so well versed in the form means a lot.

Ruth-will do, on it's waaaaaaaayyyyyy....

Michael- again friend, very high praise indeed! Thank you dark sir.

Dragoness-thank you for reading, and commenting to boost my already too large ego!

Amy- thank you very much, but pray tell... whoever in the world told you I was sane???

iloveit- thank you, as SD said, even a bad one is hard enough to do! I'm really glad you thought it was good!

dove- thank you ever so much, but I fear it will take more than a couple of asprin! LOL

Thank you everybody, I was sure this would be on the bottom by now!
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9 posted 09-28-1999 04:55 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Christopher: I'm not familiar with the format, so I wouldn't presume to tell you whether that aim was achieved or not. *S* But I can tell you this is an excellent read... and greatly enjoyed!
Isis
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10 posted 09-28-1999 07:04 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Great Job Christ, between your challenges and talent, you put me to shame.

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A hero is a man who does what he can.
~Isis~
(The Fragile Rose)


Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 09-28-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Christopher,
You met the challenge and you did well. You deserve all the praise you can get.
Marilyn
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12 posted 09-28-1999 10:33 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I am in the same boat as hoot and suthrn. I am not familiar with this form. Any tutorial would be appreciated. I just write...lol.
Poet deVine
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13 posted 09-28-1999 10:59 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I love this Christopher!!! Well done! I personally think we should find out who created this form and slap him/her! (It's probably a dead poet - someone beat us to it! )
Severn
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14 posted 09-28-1999 11:02 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

Well well! Very impressive, I must say. Very dense imagery, well worded. A success!!!!
A sestina. This is foreign to me but by the responses above I'm assuming they're hard and horrible...
congrats.
Christopher
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15 posted 09-29-1999 12:56 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

And still not sunk to the floor of the poetic ocean, amazing! You are all too wonderful for me!

suthern-presume away lass, for that is what I did here! LOL

Isis- ummm, I hope the "T" added to the end of my familiar name was a typo. If not, then my ego will really be bursting! LOL, thank you and there is no shame, you are a wonderful poet!

sey- thank you sir, and I take all the praise I can get! LOL

marilyn- and if you can find that tutor, let me know, I could use the help to!

ms deVine- AMEN! (but its probably a good thing he/she's dead...who knows what else they would have come up with!!!)

my star- I miss you! The challenge helps to curb the pang of loniliness I feel when I can't hear your voice! Thank you K!

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I'm totally in awe
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