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Grampa no no ( A Villanelle)

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Seymour Tabin
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Grandpa no no ( A villanelle )

Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo,
My grandchildren, remember me, this bray.
Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no.

I'm not simpatico to their gusto
And so their attitudes always gave way,
Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo.

These three amigos, do a fandango,
In my home, an incredible display,
Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no.

Aglow my house, to them a Disney show
And my say of no, a challenge to obey,
Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo.

The imbroglio is, I love them so,
My voice hangs mistletoe, with them touche.
Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no.

Soon they will grow and these days will go,
Will they remember my no resume?
Grandpas' no no, always in a salvo,
Ergo, and apropos, Grandpa no no.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 09-27-1999 11:57 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wow! Great poem with a great message! (Am I surprised? - NOT!!!!)

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Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 09-28-1999 10:33 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Denise,
Why the surprise? Thank you for the read and comment.
Sally S.
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3 posted 09-28-1999 10:58 AM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Wow Sy!!!!
What a great piece! I'm going to have to look into this style...I like it!
Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 09-28-1999 06:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sally,
Thank you it was fun to write.
Sunshine
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Sy, ditto "grandma" no-no! Very cute!
Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 09-28-1999 08:06 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sunshine,
You don't write like a grandma. Thanks *L*
Systematic Decay
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7 posted 09-28-1999 10:43 PM       View Profile for Systematic Decay   Email Systematic Decay   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Systematic Decay

Seymour, I liked this poem, but I dont see any difference between it and mine except for a bit of repetitiveness of the first line....is there a certain pattern to it?

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Poet deVine
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8 posted 09-28-1999 10:51 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

A lighter version of a Villanelle..most I've seen are dark. Good job!! Challenge well met!
Seymour Tabin
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Systematic Decay,
The Villenalle consists of five tercets and a quatrain in which the first and third lines
of the opening tercets recur alternately at the end of the other tercets and together as the last two lines of the quatrain. I hope this helps you. If not study one of the other villenalles and see how they repeated the lines.
Marilyn
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Seymour....a delightful read. My second look at a villanelle but I see the pattern to follow. The humor in it was a nice touch. Very nice job.
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11 posted 09-29-1999 12:41 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Bravo Sey, well done!
I liked the humor as well!
Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 09-29-1999 10:17 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

DeVine one,
Your flowers of praise humble me.
To Marilyn,
My humble thanks.
And Christopher,
Your comment are always welcome.
Pepper
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as another "grandma" no-no enjoyed this
much, Sy

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Michael
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14 posted 09-29-1999 11:57 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Impressive, Seymour. I like this one a lot.

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Michael Anderson

May Darkness find you all through the day.


Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 09-29-1999 07:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Pepper,
Never would have thought you were a grandmother. Thank you so much.
Michael,
Praise from you is praise indeed. Since I think so highly of your work.
 
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