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Mark4Him@juno.com
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Whitesboro,NY,USA


0 posted 09-27-1999 09:14 PM       View Profile for Mark4Him@juno.com   Email Mark4Him@juno.com   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark4Him@juno.com


pretty masks,these words,
without faces behind,
leaving me to feel as meaningless and hollow as they are.

some seem to touch truth
with a shy finger
at the same time reaching the feeling me.
But my mind is no longer lightened,
my heart not quickened with inspiration's chill

beauty,though rare,is treasured like a memory
music,all I once knew
fades through my ears in a painful reminder of what is now not.

and still everyone's singing a song
but no one's singing to me

----a bit scattered and confused,I know.
© Copyright 1999 Mark4Him@juno.com - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 09-27-1999 09:20 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I like this alot! Doesn't seem scattered or confusing to me!

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Denise
Marilyn
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2 posted 09-27-1999 09:21 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Not so scattered for one who has been there and revisits still from time to time. It tells a tale of loneliness and dispair. Well done. Write the scattered thoughts down and they will piece you back together. Worked well for me. (If I misinterpeted this piece I am sorry.)
Mark4Him@juno.com
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3 posted 09-27-1999 09:25 PM       View Profile for Mark4Him@juno.com   Email Mark4Him@juno.com   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark4Him@juno.com


Thanx guys,for the encouragement!Maybe it only seems scattered and confused to me because that's how I felt when I wrote it.I was going through a stage of depression that engulfed me for about a year when I wrote it.You were right in your assumption, Marilyn, depression and loneliness definitely go hand in hand.
Beki
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4 posted 09-27-1999 09:26 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

I think it makes perfect sense and I understand completely. Well said!
RainbowGirl
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5 posted 09-28-1999 02:20 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Mark: I understood it as well and I really liked it..

HUGS

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