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Mark4Him@juno.com
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since 1999-09-26
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Whitesboro,NY,USA

0 posted 1999-09-27 09:14 PM



pretty masks,these words,
without faces behind,
leaving me to feel as meaningless and hollow as they are.

some seem to touch truth
with a shy finger
at the same time reaching the feeling me.
But my mind is no longer lightened,
my heart not quickened with inspiration's chill

beauty,though rare,is treasured like a memory
music,all I once knew
fades through my ears in a painful reminder of what is now not.

and still everyone's singing a song
but no one's singing to me

----a bit scattered and confused,I know.

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Denise
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1 posted 1999-09-27 09:20 PM


I like this alot! Doesn't seem scattered or confusing to me!

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Denise

Marilyn
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
2 posted 1999-09-27 09:21 PM


Not so scattered for one who has been there and revisits still from time to time. It tells a tale of loneliness and dispair. Well done. Write the scattered thoughts down and they will piece you back together. Worked well for me. (If I misinterpeted this piece I am sorry.)
Mark4Him@juno.com
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 36
Whitesboro,NY,USA
3 posted 1999-09-27 09:25 PM



Thanx guys,for the encouragement!Maybe it only seems scattered and confused to me because that's how I felt when I wrote it.I was going through a stage of depression that engulfed me for about a year when I wrote it.You were right in your assumption, Marilyn, depression and loneliness definitely go hand in hand.

Beki
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since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA
4 posted 1999-09-27 09:26 PM


I think it makes perfect sense and I understand completely. Well said!
RainbowGirl
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since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
5 posted 1999-09-28 02:20 PM


Mark: I understood it as well and I really liked it..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.


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