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A Life Lesson

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Marilyn
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0 posted 09-27-1999 05:27 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

Per request of the author, this post has been moved to the Critical Analysis Forum

A lesson that we need to learn
is hard and cold and fast.
Depend upon the love of you
it's the one that lasts.

Upon this love all else is built
the foundation true and firm.
And in the darkest hours of life
that love most sure, confirm.

To touch from love is easiest
when the foundation is true and strong.
No darkness can turn out that light,
no body mute your song.

Hope can spring eternal
when you strive to be your best.
Listen to those who build you up
and to hell with all the rest.

True love will someday find you
if you concentrate on living.
True love will finally find you
if you concentrate on giving.



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© Copyright 1999 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 09-27-1999 09:17 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Amen!

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Denise
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 09-27-1999 09:58 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

How true!!
Julie
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3 posted 09-27-1999 10:39 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

I LOVED THIS! Where's my print button?

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert



Marilyn
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4 posted 09-27-1999 10:46 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Thankyou all. I don't know how to express my happiness . I am so new to poetry. I have written but never with the express purpose of showing my work. You make me glad I decided to show it.
DreamEvil
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5 posted 09-28-1999 05:28 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

While not in strict meter, the flow of your poem is unmistakable. Make no mistake, I am not a purist in form. I think you should go where the Muse takes you and with this piece it took you far. There are also a few spots of rough rhyme but those are easily smoothed. All in all, a wonderful piece which I am glad you brought to us here at Passions.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 09-28-1999 02:00 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Marilyn,
I agree with dreamEvil, Good poem.
WhtDove
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7 posted 09-28-1999 02:10 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Thanks Marilyn I needed this today! Great poem!
suthern
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8 posted 09-28-1999 04:50 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I wouldn't mind if true love hurried up a bit... I'm getting OLD! LOL

Seriously... I enjoyed the poem, Marilyn! And welcome!
Marilyn
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9 posted 09-28-1999 09:09 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

DreamEvil....rough edges I know I have. I am very new to poetry. I have written for therapy and very recently decided to pursue it. I have a lot to learn and I appreciate your input.

Seymour..Thankyou. :0)

WhtDove....I am truely greatful it touched you. That was excatly my intend when writing it.

suthrn.....I can relate! I too am getting old...LOL.
 
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