don't send me roses~~tell me what you think~~

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Open Poetry #2

don't send me roses~~tell me what you think~~

loverbaby
Junior Member

since 1999-09-07

Posts 15
Sioux City Iowa

0 posted 1999-09-26 11:04 PM

you promised that you would be here
when i came home
you were gone
but on the table you left me roses
you promised that you would meet me at the door
but the delivery man just gave me roses
with a card that read "Sorry baby....i promise to make it up to you"
you promised that you would have been here
when she came
you said you wouldn't miss it for the world
but you were not here
and when the nurse cam ein she said that you sent me roses
with a card that read"sorry baby....i promise to make it up to you"
you asked if i liked the roses...
i said no
you asked what you could do to make things better
i simply answered don't send me roses

Richard 33
Member

since 1999-09-09

Posts 187
glen easton, wv usa

1 posted 1999-09-26 11:12 PM

It's different, I like it, Very well spoken.
Some things just can't be done with roses,
and, promises, they have to be done in
person. As a wise person once said to me,
don't tell me show me!!!

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 1999-09-26 11:15 PM

Why does pain make for such beautiful poetry?
This is beautiful indeed.

p.s. tell him to take himself and his roses somewhere else, permanently!

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Denise

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 1999-09-26 11:16 PM

I second Richard's comments. I have come to have little faith in words and apologies. I felt your words to my soul. Well done.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 1999-09-27 07:53 AM

Loverbaby,
Tell me show me sounds right, enjoyed the read.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 1999-09-27 08:37 AM

I love the idea behind this piece

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