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don't send me roses~~tell me what you think~~

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loverbaby
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0 posted 09-26-1999 11:04 PM       View Profile for loverbaby   Email loverbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for loverbaby

you promised that you would be here
when i came home
you were gone
but on the table you left me roses
you promised that you would meet me at the door
but the delivery man just gave me roses
with a card that read "Sorry baby....i promise to make it up to you"
you promised that you would have been here
when she came
you said you wouldn't miss it for the world
but you were not here
and when the nurse cam ein she said that you sent me roses
with a card that read"sorry baby....i promise to make it up to you"
you asked if i liked the roses...
i said no
you asked what you could do to make things better
i simply answered don't send me roses
© Copyright 1999 loverbaby - All Rights Reserved
Richard 33
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glen easton, wv usa


1 posted 09-26-1999 11:12 PM       View Profile for Richard 33   Email Richard 33   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Richard 33

It's different, I like it, Very well spoken.
Some things just can't be done with roses,
and, promises, they have to be done in
person. As a wise person once said to me,
don't tell me show me!!!
Denise
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2 posted 09-26-1999 11:15 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Why does pain make for such beautiful poetry?
This is beautiful indeed.

p.s. tell him to take himself and his roses somewhere else, permanently!

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Denise
Marilyn
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since 09-26-1999
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3 posted 09-26-1999 11:16 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I second Richard's comments. I have come to have little faith in words and apologies. I felt your words to my soul. Well done.
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla


4 posted 09-27-1999 07:53 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Loverbaby,
Tell me show me sounds right, enjoyed the read.
hoot_owl_rn
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I love the idea behind this piece
 
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