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To You, My Heart

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Marilyn
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0 posted 09-26-1999 10:47 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Marilyn

A heart has wings and so it can fly,
across the miles of land worn and dry.
to touch a heart, a soul so dear,
With a wish for him to be near.
A friend to lean on and to give me strength,
One who I know will go to great length.
To dry my tears and right all the wrongs.
Done to my bleeding soul and so it belongs,
to the soulmate I know but have never seen.
The friend I have longed for but what does it mean?
To love so intensly but from afar.
Just know I am with you where ever you are.
© Copyright 1999 Marilyn - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 09-26-1999 11:02 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

This is beautiful! Very well done! For the title, I'm not sure, how about 'The Heart's Journey', or 'Wherever You Are'? Lovely, lovely poem.

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Denise
Marilyn
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2 posted 09-26-1999 11:06 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

D...thankyou for you imput. I do appreciate it. I will consider your suggestions. They are both very suitable to this poem.
Julie
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3 posted 09-27-1999 12:43 AM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

This was great...I would go with "Whereever You Are??

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert



Paul Allen Lupien
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4 posted 09-27-1999 02:17 AM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Title suggestion:"To You,My Heart"

a very sincerely written poem...

PAL

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hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 09-27-1999 08:31 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful
Marilyn
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6 posted 09-27-1999 04:27 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Julie...Thankyou for you thoughts. I appreciate them.

PAL....thankyou for you comments and your title suggestion. I like it very much.

Hoot......Just thankyou for reading my work.

[This message has been edited by Marilyn (edited 09-27-1999).]
Marilyn
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7 posted 09-27-1999 10:20 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

just doing the bumping up thing.
Michael
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8 posted 09-28-1999 05:24 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Marilyn, I thought this a wonderful piece.
I think "A Heart Has Wings" would be a most fitting title.

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Michael Anderson


Loneliness isn't in being alone;
Loneliness is alone in being.

Marilyn
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9 posted 09-28-1999 09:25 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Micheal.....I am thrilled that you like this piece. Again I have to thankyou for taking the time to look at my work and tell me what I can do to improve myself. I will take the title suggestion into consideration.
 
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