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Find your star (A sestina)

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 09-26-1999 12:55 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Find your star

A single star but shines for me
Within the heavens that I see
This voyage started with my birth
And has sailed me around the earth.
It's the brightest star in my night
The only one for me that's right.

Its been there eons and its right
This single star that shines for me
It shines and lights the darkest night
The only one that's right for me.
I followed it around the earth
And have followed it since my birth.

It seems to me most since my birth.
I only know the light is right.
I think there's one each one on earth
I know the one that shines for me.
I'm sure if you look you will see
Your star that's brightest in your night.

You cannot count the stars at night
Even if you started at birth.
You must search, search until you see
And feel the feel that all is right.
You must be dogmatic like me.
And sail your soul around the earth.
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Follow your star around the earth.
Your star is there shinning at night.
I swear by all that's good in me
That is the reason for your birth.
It is the only path that's right.
Just stick to it and you will see.


Just sail with me and you will see.
There's one for each of us on earth.
The star will guide to what is right
The brightest star you see at night.
This is why you were given birth
For you are no different from me.

So be of heart and watch the night.
Each one born, always birth for birth.
There's one for you as was for me.
© Copyright 1999 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Lucie
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1 posted 09-26-1999 01:29 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

This was beautiful Seymour.. I am not sure what the structure is for a sestina. But I thought you did a lovely job on the poem itself.
DreamEvil
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2 posted 09-26-1999 03:45 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Seymour, you surprised me with this one and that is a rare thing indeed. Well done.

You do understand that you just raised the standard for your own poetry, yes?

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ



[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 09-26-1999).]
Christopher
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3 posted 09-26-1999 04:27 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Awesome Sey!
It's hard enough to do a sestina, but you added a beautiful flair about current goings-on that made it strike home!
Bravo!
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 09-26-1999 08:29 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Seymore....absolutely beautiful. Would you mind e-mailing me the rules for this type of poetry.....I'm illiterate when it comes to this stuff

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!
Denise
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5 posted 09-26-1999 08:50 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very lovely, Seymour. I enjoyed this.

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Denise
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6 posted 09-26-1999 09:26 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Sy! This is wonderful!!! It's hard enough doing one of these but to make it rhyme so beautifully is a marvel! Contgratulations!
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 09-27-1999 12:14 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Well the responce is overwhelming.
Lucie,
I got the form from analyzing DreamEvils poem
Thank you for the kind words
DreamEvil,
from you this is high praise indeed. thank you so much.
Christopher,
Thank you for recognizing that point.
Hoot,
All you have to do is what I did. I printed DreamEvils sestina and studied what he did
It's the easiest way to do it. if you like you can print mine and follow the endings as I did. Thanks for the kind words and lots of luck.
dsnyder,
thank you you are a doll *L*
Poet deVine,
You are an inspiration to me and your words warm my heart. I forgot what the next challenge was could you remind me.
 
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