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Master
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0 posted 09-26-1999 01:53 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Filled with the wonder of great expectations
Stories of treasures that others have sought
Covered with dust of the lost generations
A lonesome plantain grows by the road

Ears towards heaven, roots in the ground
Silently waiting, covered with haze
A plant rarely cares for what is around
Blindly seeking the warm distant rays

I stand beside it, laughing with sorrow
With dirt and mud all over my boots
In wild pursuit of unending tomorrow
I dream everyday of having its roots


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I fell in love and kept on falling
© Copyright 1999 Andrey Kneller - All Rights Reserved
Beki
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1 posted 09-26-1999 04:04 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

This is very nice MAster and I love the last two lines but am wondering why stanzas tao and three have such perfect meter and rhyme and in the first stanza , you don't follow the same? I mean, it stats out NOT rhyming, and then goes to perfect rhyme...a little baffling.....good message tho. :-)
hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 09-26-1999 08:47 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nicely done

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!
Master
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3 posted 09-26-1999 12:03 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you both, Beki I'm not too much concerned with meter to tell you the truth, as long as it sounds good when I read it, that;s all that matters. Thanks for your comments.
Tara Simms
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4 posted 09-26-1999 12:25 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Master, I am a fan of your work. You have so much insight for someone so young.

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Work like you don't need the money, love like it's never going to hurt, dance like nobody's watching.

Visit my poetry website: www.geocities.com/Paris/Musee/9954/

Master
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5 posted 09-26-1999 10:22 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Tara!
Severn
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6 posted 09-26-1999 10:36 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

This struck a chord - I like this, master, I really do.
Master
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7 posted 09-26-1999 11:16 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Severn! I'm glad you liked it.
Denise
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8 posted 09-26-1999 11:29 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Great poem! I especially love the last two lines,
'In wild pursuit of unending tomorrow
I dream everyday of having its roots'

Simply wonderful!

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Denise
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 09-27-1999 08:06 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Master,
Good thoughts, good poem, well done.
RainbowGirl
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10 posted 09-27-1999 01:26 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Master: These roots wouldn't be strings would they?..

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Master
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11 posted 09-27-1999 03:14 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you Denise and Seymour!

And RainbowGirl it looks more natural when one doesn't know he's a puppet. Thanks

HUGS back at ya!

graham
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12 posted 09-27-1999 03:42 PM       View Profile for graham   Email graham   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for graham

Hey...thats both neat and amusing. Good stuff there...I enjoyed the read!

Never stop wonder-ing my friend!!

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I always wanted an edible canoe
but you can't have your kayak and eat it too!
Master
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13 posted 09-27-1999 07:36 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Graham, don't know how you got amusing from this poem, but thanks.
Paul Allen Lupien
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14 posted 09-27-1999 08:31 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Perhaps some derive amusement from the experiencing of a new perspective.This poem did provide that and ,therefore,I enjoyed it also...The root concept was particulaly well chosen.

PAL

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WhtDove
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15 posted 09-27-1999 10:28 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Very nicely said! I'm with ya on this, I wish I had their roots too!

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God gave you two ears and one mouth...so you should listen twice as much as you talk.
Master
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16 posted 09-27-1999 11:13 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thank you PAL and WhiteDove! I'm glad you guys liked it.
Mark4Him@juno.com
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17 posted 09-27-1999 11:42 PM       View Profile for Mark4Him@juno.com   Email Mark4Him@juno.com   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mark4Him@juno.com

I am struck positively dumb with the last two lines,you're wonderful!!
Master
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18 posted 09-28-1999 07:08 AM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

Thanks Mark!
passing shadows
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me too
 
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