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RainbowGirl
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0 posted 1999-09-25 11:43 PM


The shadows cast by dawn
across the fields nearby
such magic early in the morn
a splendour I can't deny

The quiet and the peace
as this new day begins
sheep with downy fleece
blackbirds start to sing

I love this early time
when gentle thoughts
cause minds to rhyme
so many lessons taught

Each blade of grass
quivers in the wind
raindrops shining like glass
leaves floating undisciplined

Even in these short few seconds
the day has turned to light
sleep my friends does beckon
dreamily I turn out the light....

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.



[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-26-1999).]

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Denise
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1 posted 1999-09-25 11:48 PM


Very dreamy, RG. I enjoyed this!

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Denise

Michael
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2 posted 1999-09-25 11:52 PM


Soft and warm as a down pillow.
Loved it, Rainbow.\

Michael

Christopher
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3 posted 1999-09-25 11:52 PM


This is beautiful...


I love this early time
when gentle thoughts
cause minds to rhyme
so many lessons taught

too tru, often is the night I find myself sitting here, realing, learning laughing and crying, only to find that time passes quickly, and before we know it, a new day dawns!
Well done RG!

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4 posted 1999-09-26 12:35 PM


I would love to be in England to see a dawn like this! Your words captured the feeling like a painting! Wonderful, Rainbow!

Julie
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5 posted 1999-09-26 12:41 PM


So picturesque (sp?), you know what i mean.

I just have to have a BIG strong cup of coffee before I greet any dawn or anything else.

I'd have to say this is one of your best.

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert




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6 posted 1999-09-26 12:52 PM


A beautiful picture, Rainbow. I envy the eyes that look out upon such a sight.

(I especially liked the line about the sheep)

RainbowGirl
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7 posted 1999-09-26 01:25 AM


dsnyder: I'm holding off the magic for a while yet..:-)))

HUGS

Michael: the picture is soft, almost hazy as the mist gathers and grows in height..:-))

HUGS

Chris: Dawn allows new perspectives

HUGS

PDV: Anytime, now is the time as the seasons change, the leaves turn to rust and fall, the lakes become colours of silver, currents running fast and slow, birds migrate....ooops, I got carried away with the magic..

HUSG

Julie: Thank you.

HUGS

Balladeer: Ewe're thinking RAMdomly ... ooops...that's another thought that fleece into the night.*g*

HUSG


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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-26-1999).]

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8 posted 1999-09-26 05:39 AM


thought this beautiful, RG,

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 1999-09-26 08:21 AM


I could picture this very clearly in my mind

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!

Scribe
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10 posted 1999-09-26 09:35 AM


the dream like quality of this piece is nicely twisted by your sleeping as dawn comes and turns night to day. i like it

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"just another lost child, trying to find my way"

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11 posted 1999-09-26 04:55 PM


Well done, RG. (Now if you can just keep those sheep safe from 'Deer and LJA! LOL)
RainbowGirl
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12 posted 1999-09-27 06:43 AM


Thanks all ..

HUGS

Suthern: That could be a hard task..*g*

HUSG


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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.



[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 09-27-1999).]

Iloveit
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13 posted 1999-09-27 10:04 AM


beautiful RG, I love it when you describe your world to us, and you do it so beautifully.....
Pepper
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14 posted 1999-09-27 10:21 AM


what a lovely visual....Rainbow I like this much........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

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15 posted 2001-09-25 07:26 AM


RainbowGirl~
Perusing the archives ....
This is lovely ....

Miss you and your poetry~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
                                   noles1@totcon.com            

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16 posted 2002-02-13 04:10 PM


what beautiful pictures you paint in your poems
passing shadows
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17 posted 2003-01-01 04:10 AM


cast by dawn...

many neat lines, good piece

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