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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 1999-09-25 10:13 PM


understandable offense
turn your head
so very quick
the air suddenly so thick
and your disgust
does shine through
oh you glare
your skin so rosy
turn your nose up
on me
i can read your thoughts
yes i can
how dare this man
stare at me
such common trash
then the seconds over
you go upon your way
your hate though
seems to linger
seems to sway..
and stay with me
always


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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

1 posted 1999-09-25 11:11 PM


Very well done. You pack so much emotion into each piece that you do. I particularly like the ending!

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Denise

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