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Maryanne....Villanelle for DeVine Challenge

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Balladeer
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0 posted 09-25-1999 09:24 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

(ain't easy to put a twist on a villanelle)

Let me tell you about my Maryanne
Not at all like the shrew
Who left me for another man.

She made my life so damned grand
It nearly broke my heart in two.
Let me tell you about my Maryanne.

There were no castles made of sand,
Not like the other, so untrue,
Who left me for another man.

She considered me the only man
With whom she'd like to go Life through
Let me tell you about my Maryanne.

She thrilled me when she touched my hand
Not so the other that I rue
Who left me for another man.

What's that? You don't quite understand?
I guess you're right. I can't fool you.
Let me tell you about my Maryanne
Who left me for another man.
© Copyright 1999 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 09-25-1999 09:27 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Very good Balladeer! I wouldn't have recognized this type had you not said what it was. Not because of you, but because of my own ignorance. I think it's real good.

A welcome home in order?
Dark Angel
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2 posted 09-25-1999 09:33 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Balladeer, I go with WhtDove, I too would not have recognized this type. I really enjoyed it, it was lovely yet sad

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What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Balladeer
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3 posted 09-25-1999 09:35 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Not home, but with laptop in working condition and, with the exception of tomorrow (Sunday) when I'll be traveling, I'm back on course. Looking forward to 6 days in North Carolina with nothing to do but play golf and write poetry. Toerag and DreamEvil may commence to quake with fear at any time, HEHE
WhtDove
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4 posted 09-25-1999 09:39 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

LOL Balladeer, glad to hear it though. Am happy to see your post around again. Was missing you! Have a great 6 days buddy, get a hole in one eh? hehe
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5 posted 09-25-1999 09:41 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is great! Lovely! I'm jealous..I'm writing a sestina that sucks! I hate to post it, for it will be shot down in a blaze of scorn..... Have a great time! I hope North Carolina isn't too wet for you!
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6 posted 09-25-1999 09:42 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

lovely 'Deer....we've missed you!

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
Michael
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7 posted 09-25-1999 09:45 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Ah, but you did put the nice twist on it.
Glad to see you'll be back for good soon.

Michael
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I'm smiling....
Balladeer
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9 posted 09-25-1999 09:53 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Darn, I've missed you guys! You're family.
Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 09-25-1999 09:57 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Balladeer,
Nothing wrong with this one, have a good rest and enjoy your away time. See you when you get back.
RainbowGirl
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11 posted 09-25-1999 10:22 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Glad I'm not villanelle...oooops

Good to have you back sweetheart..:-))

HUSG

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

Denise
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12 posted 09-25-1999 10:32 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Very lovely. Tell me, does EXCELLENCE ever become boring?!

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Denise
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Only when it's in fashion...:-))

HUGS

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You give but little when you give of your possessions. It is when you give of yourself that you truly give.

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14 posted 09-25-1999 10:42 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Thank you , SY ...and Rainbow.

Denise, you are more than qualified to answer that question.
Christopher
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15 posted 09-25-1999 11:16 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Amazing Bal---ever surprising...
Safe journey...and watch out for those sheep!

[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 09-25-1999).]
hoot_owl_rn
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16 posted 09-26-1999 09:17 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Okay...I feel rather stupid at times here. I just write , you guys practice all these formats I know nothing about and do a heck of a job with them I might add.

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!
Deb Lynne
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17 posted 09-27-1999 07:08 AM       View Profile for Deb Lynne   Email Deb Lynne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Deb Lynne

I like this one! We'll look after you in NC! Bring your umbrella! Have a nice vacation & enjoy our lovely mountains!
Toerag
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18 posted 09-27-1999 07:58 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Hey, Big Brother, much older and feeble brother....family hunh?...Well, ole' Toe ain't quakin' in fear....But I do miss your horseshit Balladeer!!! Hurry back safely!
 
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