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Winter (reposted paradelle for Nochtdraco)

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DreamEvil
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0 posted 09-24-1999 06:50 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Night is cold and lonely
Night is cold and lonely
Still the tempest does turn
Still the tempest does turn
Cold tempest is still night
and turn does the lonely.

Sparkles of ice glitter
Sparkles of ice glitter
Cloudy breath floats away
Cloudy breath floats away
Breath of cloudy sparkles
away ice breath glitter.

Winter brings it's caress
Winter brings it's caress
Delight rewards the soul
Delight rewards the soul
Winter rewards delight
it's soul brings the caress.

Winter glitter sparkles
and tempest floats away
it's cloudy soul does turn
the ice of lonely night
caress is the rewards
still breath brings cold delight.


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1 posted 09-24-1999 03:22 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Thank you for posting this one, Dream ... it paints a vivid picture ...

I am a bit confused, however, by the format ... I have not found any information on the paradelle form; I see the repetition of lines, but the order of the repeated first and last words confuse me a bit ... think you could elaborate with a "map" of the form..?

BTW: In re your post to my challenge, how about a haiku or three..?

Thanks,

Nocht

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"Nunc lento sonitu dicunt, morierus"
(Now as I hear this bell tolling softly for another, it says to me, "Thou must die.")

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2 posted 09-24-1999 03:27 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

A quote from Nan:

A total of four stanzas
Stanza's #1, #2, and #3 have to be:
Line 1 and Line 2 are repeated verbatim
LIne 3 and Line 4 are repeated verbatim
Line 5 and Line 6 are a composite of the words (no more and no less) used in lines 1-4

Stanza #4 uses all (no more and no less) of the words used in stanza's #1-#3

in the first three stanza's
Lines one and two are identical
Lines three and four are identical
Lines five and six are a composite of all of the words used in LInes one through four

Stanza four is a composite of all words used in stanza's 1 - 3


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3 posted 09-24-1999 06:56 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

OK, I am just full of questions tonight ...

When you say "composite" ... does that mean there are NO other words allowed, and how much liberty am I allowed to take with the words: ie, breathed vs breathe, etc. (should all of them be identical)? I noticed in one of the stanzas you threw in an "and" ...

I know, I know, I'm a pest!

Nocht
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4 posted 09-24-1999 07:31 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Not at all.

The "and" is from the first stanza. You must use exactly the same words, all of them. No more and no less. 'Tis more of a puzzle than a poem really.

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5 posted 09-24-1999 07:43 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Arrrgh! Are these what poets have to write if they've been very, very bad...?

A puzzle indeed ... I shall, if nothing else, make a valiant effort!

Nocht
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6 posted 09-24-1999 07:46 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Good for you! I found this to be the most challenging format I have yet attempted so I will look forward to your efforts. For a more private discourse on form, contact me by ICQ or e-mail, at your leisure.

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