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Lelly Shae
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0 posted 09-23-1999 09:19 PM       View Profile for Lelly Shae   Email Lelly Shae   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lelly Shae


Warchild

born into a world of flaming hate
they play beyond the bulletís gate
dreaming the dreams the same as you
but they live in a world of horrid truth
give them the innocence they were engaged
protect them from their fatherís rage
let them not see the bodies fall,
it wasnít even their fault after all.
yet they see it,and they donít know why
why these men hate and why they die
you know this isnít what they asked for
and here they are,living against this holy war.
© Copyright 1999 Lelly Shae - All Rights Reserved
Lelly Shae
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1 posted 09-24-1999 06:57 AM       View Profile for Lelly Shae   Email Lelly Shae   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lelly Shae

This sucks...new poem and on the 2nd page!
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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2 posted 09-24-1999 10:52 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Lelly.....this most certainly DOES NOT SUCK. It is a very gripping piece of poetry and so true of todays world. Children have no choice as to what they are born into, be it famine, war, abuse...you have done an excellent job in portraying that thought in this piece and I like the way you have written this...the rhthym and rhyme work well and it flows smoothly. Nice job and welcome to the group!!!

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!
Julie
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3 posted 09-24-1999 04:43 PM       View Profile for Julie   Email Julie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Julie

I agree with hoot; flows nicely and
an original topic, one that is
not written about enough.

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Julie
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Thou who has given so much to me,
give one thing more: a grateful heart.
>George Herbert



Lelly Shae
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4 posted 09-24-1999 06:07 PM       View Profile for Lelly Shae   Email Lelly Shae   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lelly Shae

I wasn't saying my poem sucked,I was saying
its sucks to be on the second page when I
just posted the poem...thanks a lot though
for all the comments
Lelly Shae
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5 posted 09-26-1999 10:22 AM       View Profile for Lelly Shae   Email Lelly Shae   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lelly Shae

I'm posting a reply so my poem can get back on the first page.
hoot_owl_rn
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6 posted 09-26-1999 11:29 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Lelly...for the misunderstanding and because I like what this poem has to say....up yo go again

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Some people come into our lives and quickly go. Some stay for awhile and leave footprints in our heart and we are never ever the same.

Thank you all for leaving footprints!!
 
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