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DreamEvil
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0 posted 09-22-1999 01:26 AM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Deceit drips from women's lips like acid.
Lives are scared by the melting of heart's flesh.
Such pain is caused by a face held placid.
Wounds scar over then they open them fresh.

Sorry Ladies, no two sides to this coin.
For unknowing carnal knowledge, you lie.
You think a man's heart is yours to purloin.
You wont have the joy of making me cry.

I will remember women's grace come dawn.
I cast aspersions of truth on them now.
For this life at least I am no one's pawn.
My ship of fate I command from the prow.

Soon enough will I come to calm my rage.
Distrust now has riven me to the core.
No more will I make of my mind a cage.
Hatred abates for she whom I adore.


©1999 DreamEvil



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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©



[This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 09-22-1999).]
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Severn
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1 posted 09-22-1999 01:28 AM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

OUCH! You still can't remove this grin I have permanently a-fixed though, Dream!
I like this though, I must say.
Lucie
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2 posted 09-22-1999 01:40 AM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Bitter bitter bitter.. there must be a full moon.. for I am feeling the same way about men..heheh
Christopher
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3 posted 09-22-1999 01:42 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Sizzzzzle...
the fire is ignited again!
Way to go!
Michael
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4 posted 09-22-1999 02:05 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

You're on a roll, Dream.
This one cuts deep. Excellent, as always.



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Michael Anderson


And so, being young and dipt in folly
I fell in love with melancholy,
But dreams - of those who dream as I,
Aspiringly, are damned, and die:


EAP

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5 posted 09-22-1999 03:17 AM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Ah Dream, I like this, but fear to comment....

Now when you write, I fear they're aimed my direction....I'm sorry. I do hope I am terribly wrong.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale

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6 posted 09-22-1999 03:30 AM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

Nice!

However, I regret opening my mouth so soon. When I read this piece, the distrust seemed inhumanly strong, and I'm not fully sure where the perspective is coming from. But good writing, strong expression.

It hit me hard, I am just not used to reading such dark thoughts. Riven says it all.

[This message has been edited by Artur Hawkwing (edited 09-22-1999).]
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7 posted 09-22-1999 08:24 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Bitterness touches us all, thank you.

I take that as high tribute Artur, thank you.
I felt the need to release some bitterness and feel I succeeded well.
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8 posted 09-22-1999 08:34 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

You certainly did, and I'm proud of you for doing it so well.
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