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caroline
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0 posted 1999-09-21 08:46 PM



First date he brought her wildflowers
knowing she was different from the rest
so to the fields beside the roads
he went and chose the best

Roses might be more elegant
Richer and more intense
But there she was, a wild one
On the other side of the fence

She buried her nose in that big bouquet
Let the petals tickle her face
The sparkles flashing in her eyes
Are what brought him to this place

Ah but he loved to hear her laugh
the sound of it like child's play
It bathed his heart in diamond-dust
He prayed she'd always be this way

As time went on he loved her more
yet something in her seemed so lost
He couldn't draw it from her…
a secret of unmeasured cost

Oh please bring to me this enigma you keep
this mystery you've always carried
Do let me share this burden of yours
Let's chase the shadows before we're married

She looked at him with softened eyes
and her quiet voice gently said
some things should not be brought to light
some memories are better left dead

And so they were wed one rainy day
her secrets yet guarded within
Still he longed to set her free
and make her soul complete again

One night they slept entwined together
her voice spoke to him as in a dream
Help me please, I can't live with this
and suddenly…she screamed

Straight up she sat with terror'd eyes
He tried to calm her shrieking fright
But no comfort was there for her
even rocked in his arms all night

When morning finally shed its cloak
on the mirror he found a mark
in lipstick red it said goodbye
she'd disappeared into the dark

The letter came three days later
she said she couldn't take the pain
of those long buried nightmares
howling up to the surface again

Her life had been a jagged blade
and the scars ran much too deep
No matter how hard she tried
sanity would not be hers to keep

The memories had always haunted her
and she knew they always would
He couldn't relieve her of those ghosts
She couldn't live where those ghosts stood

He knew she'd tried to forget her past
and make a new life without pain
A temporary happiness at best
A flimsy mask for a horrid stain

Now he sleeps alone at night
sometimes with his own anguished cries
still missing her diamond-dust laugh
and the wildflowers in her eyes

caroline 1999
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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

© Copyright 1999 Caroline - All Rights Reserved
Echo Rhayne
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1 posted 1999-09-21 08:52 PM


I'm going to cry *sniff* That was a beautiful, yet sad poem. In a way I can almost relate to her. You expressed it well!
Master
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since 1999-08-18
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Boston, MA
2 posted 1999-09-21 08:57 PM


*snif*... *snif* One of the few women worth my tears just made my cry... Sad poem, but I still like it, to the top you go!

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I fell in love and kept on falling

Lynn
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since 1999-09-20
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3 posted 1999-09-21 09:02 PM


That was a beautiful poem. I
really enjoyed reading it. It
described why I left this guy. I
had to many secrets hidden from him
and could not stand to let him
know. Your poem really got to my
heart.


caroline
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4 posted 1999-09-21 09:40 PM


Thank you...Echo, Lynn...Master, sweetie..here's a hanky...there, there now...~*LOL*~

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 1999-09-21 09:48 PM


So tragic....but very well written

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus

Pepper
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since 1999-08-19
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6 posted 1999-09-22 01:44 PM


Caroline.....my dear...you truly out did yourself with this poem......absolutely first class work!!!!!! Saving this......

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams

Julie
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7 posted 1999-09-22 02:17 PM


This was absolutely beautiful and I am
crying *sniff* *sniff*. I really like
that line "bathed his heart in diamond
dust." Great metaphor.

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Julie
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..."to thine own self be true."
>William Shakespeare



Toerag
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Ala bam a
8 posted 1999-09-22 02:32 PM


Nuthin could be finer than to be in Carolina in the morning, nuthin could be sweeter than to throw her down and eat...um, uh, wrong forum....sorry....but this was a great poem dear one........
U K Hero
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England
9 posted 1999-09-22 02:49 PM


So sad, So good, so to the top you go.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
10 posted 1999-09-22 04:42 PM


Caroline, this poems likes me a lot!
Sunshine
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11 posted 1999-09-22 04:54 PM


Caroline, this poems likes me a lot!
PhaerieChild
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since 1999-08-30
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Aloha, Oregon
12 posted 1999-09-22 05:05 PM


Caroline,
Very few poems strike my heart to tears but this one did (still sniveling) It's a beautiful piece of work and I thank you for sharing it with us. (gonna go get some Kleenex now)

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What you hid from your parents as kids, you will hide from your kids as parents. ~Cletus T Judd~



Iloveit
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since 1999-09-02
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13 posted 1999-09-22 05:27 PM


great poem, I really liked it.....
The Keeper Of Keys
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14 posted 1999-09-22 07:07 PM


That was awesome, you tell one good story with a poem, that was tremendous. I loved it.



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~^~^~The Keeper Of Keys~^~^~

To be nobody but yourself--In a world which is doing its best, night and day, to make you like everybody else--Means to fight the hardest battle any human being can fight, and never stop fighting.


caroline
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15 posted 1999-09-23 05:25 AM


To all who responded to this piece, my deepest gratitude. I wasn't sure if I liked it, but posted it anyway...I'm glad you enjoyed it.

And to get a response from the TOERAG himself!!! My day is made
(Sing it Toe...ROTFL!!)

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

Beki
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since 1999-09-15
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Newport Beach, CA, USA
16 posted 1999-09-23 05:29 AM


beautiful telling of a bittersweet tale....and nice imagery too really like the end image
"still missing her diamond-dust laugh
and the wildflowers in her eyes"
Excellent!

DBeth
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since 1999-09-09
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17 posted 1999-09-23 09:42 AM


Excellent poem Caroline! My hankie is dripping wet.(sniff,sniff)I feel the need to read again.To the top for you!


DBeth

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When we give of ourselves
whole heartedly,it comes
back around ten fold.

caroline
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18 posted 1999-09-23 06:59 PM


Thanks Beki & DBeth

With all this cryin' going on, y'all stay away from North Carolina, ya hear? Them folks got enough water there!

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The only man worth your tears will never make you cry...

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