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Deep Blue Beckons |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Nearly dead in water now, still flailing,though a pitiful little, water lapping, laughing gulls flying over, shake their heads glad to not be me as they wing homeward Storm approaching as rain patters softly I laugh a weak laugh as if this ocean needed more Large wave,coming out of nowhere, sloshes me under- bobbing buoy at the mercy of the sea- too far to swim with these exhausted limbs, my efforts having done me in as the deep blue beckons, seducing,wanting me, each tiny stroke depletes reserve nearer to resolution now, soon arms straight down for silent descent... ------------------ |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
really good description Paul, great poem, you can feel the helplessness and despair....whew....life can be rough huh? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
wow...really well written...held me and wouldn't let go...then pulled me in to read again........ ------------------ May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Great imagery and nicely written.......this flows well ------------------ "In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I'm learning quickly just how powerful the messages are that you portray when you write. The words you choose have a way of painting just exactly want you want the reader to feel. Really nice job....I'll be looking for more. ------------------ I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale |
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Paul Allen Lupien Member
since 1999-09-09
Posts 114Ferndale,Mi.USA |
Really wish I could reply to all your words without "bumping" the poem up on the page.Sometimes I withold my gratitude for this reason.(perhaps there is a way to allow only non-writer comments to provide such impetus?)Anyhow,thank you all very,very much,both for reading and responding. group huggingly, Paul ------------------ |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
That's OK, I would have come along and bumped it right up there anyway :-)This is very well done, Paul...everything everyone else said I echo twice..a fine piece! I posted early today another haiku sequence, one of my best..especially wanted you to see it...(never could find empathy thread again to see what you said  ...called COME IN FROM THE FIELD.------------------ "We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?" --John Keating, Dead Poets Society |
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