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Deep Blue Beckons

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Paul Allen Lupien
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0 posted 09-21-1999 01:20 PM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Nearly dead in water now,
still flailing,though a pitiful little,
water lapping,
laughing gulls flying over,
shake their heads
glad to not be me
as they wing homeward

Storm approaching
as rain patters softly
I laugh a weak laugh
as if this ocean needed more
Large wave,coming out of nowhere,
sloshes me under-
bobbing buoy at the mercy of the sea-
too far to swim with these exhausted limbs,
my efforts having done me in
as the deep blue beckons,
seducing,wanting me,
each tiny stroke depletes reserve
nearer to resolution now,
soon arms straight down
for silent descent...


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Iloveit
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1 posted 09-21-1999 02:47 PM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

really good description Paul, great poem, you can feel the helplessness and despair....whew....life can be rough huh?
Pepper
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2 posted 09-21-1999 02:48 PM       View Profile for Pepper   Email Pepper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pepper

wow...really well written...held me and wouldn't let go...then pulled me in to read again........

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May your days be filled with lots of sunshine and your nights lit up by golden moonbeams
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 09-21-1999 08:49 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Great imagery and nicely written.......this flows well

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
poetFemmeFatale
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4 posted 09-23-1999 07:16 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

I'm learning quickly just how powerful the messages are that you portray when you write. The words you choose have a way of painting just exactly want you want the reader to feel. Really nice job....I'll be looking for more.

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I beckon you to come...I lure you with my tongue... - poet FemmeFatale


Paul Allen Lupien
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5 posted 09-24-1999 12:23 AM       View Profile for Paul Allen Lupien   Email Paul Allen Lupien   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Allen Lupien

Really wish I could reply to all your words without "bumping" the poem up on the page.Sometimes I withold my gratitude for this reason.(perhaps there is a way to allow only non-writer comments to provide such impetus?)Anyhow,thank you all very,very much,both for reading and responding.

group huggingly,

Paul

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Beki
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6 posted 09-24-1999 04:57 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

That's OK, I would have come along and bumped it right up there anyway :-)This is very well done, Paul...everything everyone else said I echo twice..a fine piece! I posted early today another haiku sequence, one of my best..especially wanted you to see it...(never could find empathy thread again to see what you said ...called COME IN FROM THE FIELD.

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"We read and write poetry because we are members of the human race. And the human race is filled with passion.....the powerful play goes on and you may contribute a verse. What will your verse be?"
--John Keating, Dead Poets Society
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