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Fly With the Dawn

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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 09-20-1999 10:16 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

The sky dazzles a deep, sapphire blue,
And the clouds fly upon a gentle breath.
These heavens light in remembrance of you,
As the shadows darkly mourn your death.

Your candle flickered and faded to black,
As you gave up on the one who truly counts.
No falling crystal tear can bring you back,
Your soul is dry, now void of life's fount.

I offered my hand as you slowly sank under,
But perhaps you had no real chance at all.
When the word came, my pain was like thunder,
Ripping through the air with an eerie call.

The sky is still blue and the clouds still fly,
Even though your spirit is eternally gone.
Along with you, a piece of my soul has died,
But I will remember you as you fly with the dawn.

~*~Never Give Up Hope~*~

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller

© Copyright 1999 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Beki
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1 posted 09-20-1999 10:21 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

WOnderful image.......perhaps a little too cheerful for this sad and poignant poem.
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2 posted 09-20-1999 10:23 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

Who is 'you' in this poem? This poem rang with some grave bells, and also with the sighing of the dawn. And, long time no see, Alwye!
Alwye
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3 posted 09-20-1999 10:25 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you both...there is no real 'you' in this poem..just used the feelings I felt when a friend of mine was contemplating suicide..and yeah, long time, no see! School for me! Oh, that was pathetic...oh well. Time for homework...

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller

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4 posted 09-20-1999 10:55 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

I'm in awe. This is beautiful, Alwye.

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*Elizabeth*

"Dwelt a maid belov'd and cherish'd by high and low,
But with autumn leaf she perish'd, long time ago..."


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5 posted 09-20-1999 11:02 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

I see that your performance is consistent.

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Now and forever my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvilŠ

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6 posted 09-21-1999 10:41 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Alwye, nice imagery

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"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Nan
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7 posted 09-21-1999 07:50 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Alwye, there are so many poems written on this subject - it's a very difficult emotion to handle - and you do it in a very lovely way - as Alwye's.....
Tara Simms
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8 posted 09-21-1999 08:31 PM       View Profile for Tara Simms   Email Tara Simms   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Tara Simms's Home Page   View IP for Tara Simms

Alwye, this is beautiful. I love the sentiment "But I will remember you as you fly with the dawn".

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Alwye
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9 posted 09-21-1999 09:36 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you all very much for your kindness.

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller

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Purgatorial Incarceration


10 posted 09-21-1999 10:08 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I love all of your work Alwye, but this stands above the rest!
Alwye
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11 posted 09-22-1999 08:44 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Well, thank you very much, Christopher, I truly appreciate it.

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller

Ayla
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12 posted 09-22-1999 08:53 PM       View Profile for Ayla   Email Ayla   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ayla

Beautiful work Alwye..

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The heart is happiest when it beats for others..
WhtDove
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13 posted 09-22-1999 09:20 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Great one, sad yet beautiful too! Very nice!
Alwye
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14 posted 09-23-1999 09:03 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thanks!

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*Krista Knutson*

Mockery is a form of ignorance; silence, a form of wisdom. -- Daniel L. Miller

 
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