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Brother Cain

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Michael
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0 posted 09-20-1999 03:20 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

BROTHER CAIN

Brother Cain, where does thou hide,
Am I to die in thy shadows?
I am slain, death by my bride,
Please tell me why ‘fore thy goes.

I heed your blow, passed in vain,
Mother, attuned, ever to weep.
I bleed but know not your pain,
My brother - your wound must run deep.

Darkness creeps across my vision,
In your waste of humanity.
Canst thou sleep with your decision?
Does thou taste the blood of me?

Leave me dead, silenced forever,
Now, but the haunt of memory.
In thy head, O' will I ever,
Abel, be the taunt of thee.

Live an outcast, in thy shame,
I will ever be the sleeper.
‘Til sleeps at last thy branded name,
I Will be my brother's keeper.


[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 09-20-1999).]
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1 posted 09-20-1999 03:53 PM       View Profile for poetFemmeFatale   Email poetFemmeFatale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for poetFemmeFatale

Wow, Michael....all I can say is wow....superbly written, and I'm sure "he" will be grateful and in awe at what you've written here.....I'm not sure about the mood you wanted to portray...I sensed love, anguish, solitude, sadness...on and on.

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2 posted 09-20-1999 03:57 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Marvelous. Well done, Sir.
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3 posted 09-20-1999 05:23 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Extreamly well written Michael.......you've out did yourself!!

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5 posted 09-20-1999 08:24 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

There's the Michael we know and love...
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extraordinary....

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Lucie
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7 posted 09-20-1999 10:30 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

I appreciated this poem Michael.. I feel that I read the right message, tell me if I am wrong. But do you not speak of the Cain banished to Nod? I found you poem to be interesting.. I am not sure that everyone knows the story. It was very good..
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8 posted 09-20-1999 10:41 PM       View Profile for Artur Hawkwing   Email Artur Hawkwing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artur Hawkwing

Makes me sad reading this. If this is indeed the Cain banished after slewing his brother, then I had no choice but to imagine how Abel felt while reading this, because Abel didn't seem to know the covetousness which bore a seed in Cain's blood.

I loved this one, as I love all your poems. You know well enough how deep your writings impact others, so I will refrain from saying the same here for me, except it's true.
Michael
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9 posted 09-20-1999 10:44 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Indeed, Lucie, you are right.
When asked where his brother was by God, Cain responded "Am I my brother's keeper?"
God heard Abel's blood crying from the earth and cursed Cain and banished him to Nod, (A land east of Eden).

This poem was meant to reflect how Cain in killing his brother (presumed over jealousy) would never rise above his slain brother's memory, living in shame, banished by God. Abel, in essence, becomes the keeper of Cain for all his remaining days.

Artur, thank you for the kind words. Indeed, I was trying to convey the pain and confusion of Abel in this scenario.


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Lucie
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10 posted 09-20-1999 11:01 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

Its funny.. tis not cain who interests me so much as Lilith.. Do you know of her?
Michael
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11 posted 09-20-1999 11:03 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Would that be who Cain took for a wife?
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12 posted 09-20-1999 11:04 PM       View Profile for DreamEvil   Email DreamEvil   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit DreamEvil's Home Page   View IP for DreamEvil

Darkly done! Truly a delight to my heart.

Liltih was Adam's first wife and Queen of the Succubi.

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Lucie
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13 posted 09-20-1999 11:04 PM       View Profile for Lucie   Email Lucie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lucie

a fallen angel .. by choice




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Michael
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14 posted 09-20-1999 11:09 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

I've heard many stories of who she was, where she came from - the cause of much controvery it seems.

Michael


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15 posted 09-20-1999 11:42 PM       View Profile for Starith   Email Starith   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Starith

I must agree with Devine...all I can say is wow...

Wonderful poem.

Star

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