How to Join Member's Area Private Library Search Today's Topics p Login
Main Forums Discussion Tech Talk Mature Content Archives
   Nav Win
 Archives
 Open Poetry #2 Archive
 battle field of courage
 1 2 3 4
Follow us on Facebook

 This is an Archive. You may post a reply, but new topics are not allowed.

 
User Options
Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Admin Print Send ECard
Passions in Poetry

battle field of courage

 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
Jim Raynor
Member
since 09-19-99
Posts 63
Churubusco Indiana USA


0 posted 09-19-99 06:03 PM       View Profile for Jim Raynor   Email Jim Raynor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jim Raynor's Home Page   View IP for Jim Raynor

Blood stains on my hands not my own but my enemys,

now I stand on this battle field all alone with blood stains on my hands and courage of a lion in my heart.

------------------
$*%Jim Raynor%*$
© Copyright 1999 Jim Raynor - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


1 posted 09-19-99 06:10 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Jim....this spoke volumes in very few words, A very good idea. I myself may change the format just a little, it doesn't change the meaning one bit, but definately improves the flow and makes it more reader friendly....this is merely a suggestion:

Battlefield of Courage

Blood stains on my hands,
not my own but my enemys,
now I stand on this battle field,
all alone,
with blood stains on my hands
and courage of a lion in my heart.



------------------
"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Jim Raynor
Member
since 09-19-99
Posts 63
Churubusco Indiana USA


2 posted 09-19-99 06:15 PM       View Profile for Jim Raynor   Email Jim Raynor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jim Raynor's Home Page   View IP for Jim Raynor

okay sounds good owl i just thought of this one in my head a minute ago and didnt bother redoing it

------------------
$*%Jim Raynor%*$
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 07-05-99
Posts 11105
Glen Hope, PA USA


3 posted 09-19-99 06:17 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

It actually reads very well that way, and it is an interesting piece of poetry.

------------------
"In the depths of winter, I finally learned that there was in me an invincible summer" ~Albert Camus
Jim Raynor
Member
since 09-19-99
Posts 63
Churubusco Indiana USA


4 posted 09-19-99 07:23 PM       View Profile for Jim Raynor   Email Jim Raynor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jim Raynor's Home Page   View IP for Jim Raynor

im glad you think its interesting


-jim
Jim Raynor will be notified of replies
 Post A Reply   Go to the Next Oldest/Previous Topic Return to Topic Page Go to the Next Newest Topic 
All times are ET (US) Top
  User Options
>> Archives >> Open Poetry #2 >> battle field of courage Format for Better Printing EMail to a Friend Create a Greeting Card with this Poem
Print Send ECard

 

pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Today's Topics | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary



© Passions in Poetry and netpoets.com 1998-2013
All Poetry and Prose is copyrighted by the individual authors